Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but can be improved by making it more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors. For example, say "I don't like singing because I had a bad experience with it, but I enjoy listening to music in my free time as it helps me relax and feel happy."

例: I don't like singing because I had a bad experience with it, but I enjoy listening to music in my free time as it helps me relax and feel happy.

提案: Try to structure your answer clearly and use correct tenses. Also, use linking words to connect ideas. For example, "Yes, I learned to sing in secondary school, but I had a bad experience and stopped. However, I now listen to music daily to relax and improve my mood."

例: Yes, I learned to sing in secondary school, but I had a bad experience and stopped. However, I now listen to music daily to relax and improve my mood.

提案: Your answer is good but can be clearer and more natural. Use linking words and correct phrasing. For example, "I want to sing for my friends and family, especially with my sister's partner, to make them happy. Although I don't know how to sing well, I am willing to learn, possibly through coaching classes."

例: I want to sing for my friends and family, especially with my sister's partner, to make them happy. Although I don't know how to sing well, I am willing to learn, possibly through coaching classes.

提案: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Use linking words for coherence. For example, "Yes, singing and listening to music can bring happiness to anyone because they are relaxing and improve a person's mood."

例: Yes, singing and listening to music can bring happiness to anyone because they are relaxing and improve a person's mood.

× I don't like singing because I have very bad experience in singing, but I want to listen music in my free time because it is very relaxing activity for me and I want to become happy by listening music.

✓ I don't like singing because I have a very bad experience in singing, but I want to listen to music in my free time because it is a very relaxing activity for me and I want to become happy by listening to music.

The word 'experience' is a countable noun here and needs an article 'a'. Also, 'listen music' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'listen to music' because 'listen' requires the preposition 'to'. Similarly, 'listening music' should be 'listening to music'. Adding 'a' before 'very relaxing activity' is necessary because 'activity' is a singular countable noun.

× Yes I learned in my past my secondary school but I have very bad experience in my past then I will drop it.

✓ Yes, I learned in my past at my secondary school but I had a very bad experience then I dropped it.

The sentence mixes tenses incorrectly. 'Learned' is past tense, so 'have very bad experience' should be 'had a very bad experience' to maintain past tense consistency. 'I will drop it' should be 'I dropped it' because the action happened in the past. Also, 'in my past my secondary school' is awkward; 'at my secondary school' is correct preposition usage.

× Yes I learned in my past my secondary school but I have very bad experience in my past then I will drop it.

✓ Yes, I learned in my past at my secondary school but I had a very bad experience then I dropped it.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used with 'my secondary school'; the correct preposition is 'at' when referring to attending a school. Also, 'in my past' is redundant and awkward; it is better omitted or replaced with 'then' to indicate sequence.

× But currently I am listening music daily for my relaxation and improving my mood.

✓ But currently I am listening to music daily for my relaxation and to improve my mood.

The verb 'listening' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by the object 'music'. Also, 'improving my mood' should be parallel in structure with 'for my relaxation', so 'to improve my mood' is better.

× I want to sing for my friends and family and also with my sister partner because I want to make them happy but I don't know how to sing but if they want I can learn especially from any coaching classes.

✓ I want to sing for my friends and family and also with my sister's partner because I want to make them happy but I don't know how to sing. But if they want, I can learn, especially from any coaching classes.

'Sister partner' is incorrect; it should be 'sister's partner' to show possession. Also, the sentence is long and needs punctuation for clarity. Adding commas and periods improves readability.

× I want to sing for my friends and family and also with my sister partner because I want to make them happy but I don't know how to sing but if they want I can learn especially from any coaching classes.

✓ I want to sing for my friends and family and also with my sister's partner because I want to make them happy but I don't know how to sing. However, if they want, I can learn, especially from any coaching classes.

The modal verb 'can' is used correctly, but the sentence lacks proper conjunctions and punctuation to separate ideas. Adding 'However' and commas improves clarity and flow.

× Yes, singing and listening music can be give happiness to any anybody because it is very relaxing and comfortable for any person and it improves their mood because it is very good thing and relaxing.

✓ Yes, singing and listening to music can give happiness to anybody because it is very relaxing and comfortable for any person and it improves their mood because it is a very good and relaxing thing.

'Listening music' should be 'listening to music' as 'listen' requires 'to'. 'Can be give' is incorrect; it should be 'can give'. 'Any anybody' is redundant; 'anybody' alone suffices. 'Very good thing and relaxing' needs an article 'a' and better word order: 'a very good and relaxing thing'.