Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but needs to be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors like 'songs plays' should be 'songs play'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, try to limit your answer to 3-4 sentences for clarity.

例: Yes, I like singing because it plays an important role in people's lives. When someone feels sad, singing enjoyable or emotional songs can provide comfort and lift their mood.

提案: Your answer needs better structure and grammar. Use past tense correctly and avoid repetition. Also, use linking words to make your answer coherent. Try to be more specific about your learning experience.

例: Yes, during my school days, I learned a song by One Direction. I practiced it for several months and performed it on Teachers' Day. Everyone appreciated my performance, which encouraged me a lot.

提案: Your answer is heartfelt but has grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Use correct pronouns and avoid repetition. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

例: I would like to sing for my mother because she has devoted her life to raising my siblings and me. Singing for her would be a way to show my gratitude and bring her happiness.

提案: Your answer is repetitive and lacks clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repeating phrases like 'listen or sing'. Also, try to be concise and grammatically correct.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness and a sense of freedom. When people feel low, singing or listening to their favourite songs can uplift their mood and provide comfort.

× I like singing because songs plays a huge important role in a person's life.

✓ I like singing because songs play a hugely important role in a person's life.

The subject 'songs' is plural, so the verb should be 'play' instead of 'plays'. Also, 'huge important' is incorrect; it should be 'hugely important' to correctly use the adverb form modifying 'role'.

× If he's feeling sad then he can sing a little enjoyable songs or very emotional songs which can give you little bit of satisfaction when you are down or feel.

✓ If he's feeling sad, then he can sing a few enjoyable songs or very emotional songs which can give him a little bit of satisfaction when he is down or feeling low.

'A little enjoyable songs' is incorrect; 'a few enjoyable songs' is correct for countable nouns. Also, 'give you little bit' should be 'give him a little bit' to maintain pronoun consistency. 'Feel' at the end is incomplete; it should be 'feeling low' or similar for clarity.

× During my school days, I have known one song of One Direction and I have prepared it for the months and I have performed this song on a special occasion.

✓ During my school days, I knew one song of One Direction, and I prepared it for months and performed this song on a special occasion.

The present perfect tense 'have known' and 'have prepared' is incorrect for a specific past time 'during my school days'. Simple past tense 'knew' and 'prepared' should be used. Also, 'for the months' is incorrect; 'for months' is correct.

× It's in Teachers Day where I perform this song and everybody likes it and makes a huge compliment for me.

✓ It was on Teachers' Day when I performed this song, and everybody liked it and gave me huge compliments.

The event happened in the past, so past tense verbs 'was', 'performed', 'liked', and 'gave' should be used instead of present tense. Also, 'Teachers Day' should be 'Teachers' Day' with possessive apostrophe. 'Makes a huge compliment' is incorrect; 'gave me huge compliments' is appropriate.

× She has done she have done many things and so it's our duty and time to uplift her and give him the joy.

✓ She has done many things, and so it's our duty and time to uplift her and give her joy.

The phrase 'she have done' is incorrect and redundant. Also, 'give him the joy' is wrong because the pronoun should refer to 'her' (the mother), so 'give her joy' is correct.

× Yes, singing can give you a feel of happiness and freedom whenever you feel or low or down you can listen or sing or listen or sing a song where you feel comfortable where which you like the most and it gives you the feel of satisfaction and it uplift your mood and.

✓ Yes, singing can give you a feeling of happiness and freedom. Whenever you feel low or down, you can listen to or sing a song that makes you feel comfortable and that you like the most. It gives you a feeling of satisfaction and uplifts your mood.

The original sentence is run-on and confusing. 'Feel of happiness' should be 'feeling of happiness'. 'Feel or low or down' is incorrect; it should be 'feel low or down'. 'Listen or sing or listen or sing' is repetitive; simplified to 'listen to or sing'. 'Where which you like the most' is incorrect; 'that you like the most' is correct. 'It uplift your mood' should be 'it uplifts your mood' for subject-verb agreement.