Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid redundancy. Also, correct minor grammatical errors like "in my by my own" to "on my own". Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I like singing on my own rather than in a group because it helps me relax and brings me inner peace.

提案: Avoid repeating phrases like "is not is not" and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to explain reasons clearly and make your answer more natural.

例: No, I have never learned to sing because I feel my voice is not melodious, and my lack of confidence has prevented me from trying.

提案: Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Make your ideas clear and coherent by using linking words. Also, ensure your sentences are complete and grammatically correct.

例: I would love to sing for my parents because I want to express my gratitude and happiness towards them through a peaceful song.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by avoiding repetition and making sentences more concise. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Definitely, singing can bring happiness and peace to people because different songs suit different moods; for example, energetic rock songs can uplift us, while soothing songs help us relax.

× I like singing in my by my own rather than being in a group or in front of anyone else.

✓ I like singing on my own rather than being in a group or in front of anyone else.

The phrase 'by my own' is incorrect. The correct preposition to use here is 'on' as in 'on my own', which means alone or independently.

× No, I have not tried learning singing because I think that my voice is not is not melodious for singing and I think my lack of confidence has denied me from learning.

✓ No, I have not tried learning to sing because I think that my voice is not melodious for singing and I think my lack of confidence has prevented me from learning.

The phrase 'learning singing' is incorrect; the correct form is 'learning to sing' because 'learn' is followed by the infinitive form of the verb. Also, 'denied me from learning' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'prevented me from learning'.

× I think that my voice is not is not melodious for singing

✓ I think that my voice is not melodious for singing

The repetition 'is not is not' is a typographical error and should be corrected to a single 'is not'.

× I would, I think I would sing a song that would represent my gratefulness and my and my happiness towards them.

✓ I would, I think I would sing a song that would represent my gratefulness and my happiness towards them.

The phrase 'and my and my happiness' contains a repeated pronoun 'and my' which is redundant and should be removed.

× I would sing a song that also brings peace to them and is coming.

✓ I would sing a song that also brings peace to them and is calming.

The word 'coming' is incorrect in this context; the intended adjective is likely 'calming', which means soothing or peaceful.