Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by correcting grammar and making it more natural. For example, say "express emotions" instead of "express emotion" and "boost my confidence" instead of "boost of my confidence." Also, avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas smoothly.

例: Definitely, I love singing because it helps me express my emotions and relieve stress. Moreover, it improves my mood and boosts my confidence.

提案: Your answer needs better sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct verb forms, for example, "I have participated in many singing competitions." Also, avoid run-on sentences by breaking them into clear parts.

例: I took singing classes when I was young. Since then, I have enjoyed singing as a hobby, practice regularly, and have participated in many singing competitions.

提案: There is a grammatical error in "I'm feel" which should be "I feel." Also, expand your answer with more details to make it richer and use linking words for coherence.

例: I want to sing for my family members because I feel very confident when I am with them. Singing for them makes me happy and strengthens our bond.

提案: Avoid phrases like "According to me"; instead, say "I think" or "In my opinion." Also, correct "peoples" to "people." Use linking words to connect ideas and make your answer more natural and clear.

例: I think singing can bring happiness to people because it allows them to express their emotions and relieve stress, which helps them feel relaxed.

× Singing helps improve my mood and boost of my confidence.

✓ Singing helps improve my mood and boost my confidence.

The phrase 'boost of my confidence' is incorrect because 'boost' should be directly followed by the object without 'of'. The correct form is 'boost my confidence'. This is a common error with quantifiers and prepositional phrases.

× I took singing classes when I was young. I enjoy singing as a hobby and practice regularly and participated many singing competitions.

✓ I took singing classes when I was young. I enjoy singing as a hobby, practice regularly, and have participated in many singing competitions.

The sentence mixes tenses and lacks proper conjunctions and prepositions. 'Participated many singing competitions' is incorrect; it should be 'have participated in many singing competitions' to indicate experience up to now. Also, commas and conjunctions are needed to separate the activities properly.

× I want to sing for my family members because I'm feel very confident in front of them.

✓ I want to sing for my family members because I feel very confident in front of them.

The phrase 'I'm feel' is incorrect because 'I'm' (I am) should not be followed by the base verb 'feel'. The correct form is 'I feel'. This is an error in pronoun and verb usage.

× According to me, yes, singing can bring happiness to peoples because it is a way to express emotions and release stress and we can feel relaxed.

✓ According to me, yes, singing can bring happiness to people because it is a way to express emotions and release stress and we can feel relaxed.

The word 'peoples' is incorrect in this context. 'People' is the correct plural form when referring to persons in general. 'Peoples' refers to distinct ethnic groups, which is not intended here.