Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally relevant and shows enthusiasm, but it lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise, avoid redundancy, and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, be specific about the types of songs or occasions to enrich your answer.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it lifts my mood and helps me relieve stress. Moreover, I often sing with my friends during gatherings, which makes the experience even more enjoyable and fun. Singing different types of songs always lifts my spirits.

提案: Your answer needs to be clearer and grammatically correct. Use proper sentence structure and avoid awkward phrasing. Also, provide more specific details about your learning experience to make your answer richer and more coherent.

例: Yes, I learnt how to sing when I was in fifth grade. I had a music teacher who taught me to sing songs and also play the piano and tabla. I am very grateful for that experience.

提案: Your answer is on the right track but incomplete and contains grammatical mistakes. Make sure to complete your sentences and use linking words to connect ideas. Also, try to use a wider range of vocabulary and be specific about why singing for them is special.

例: I would like to sing for my husband, family, and friends because they are very supportive and appreciate my efforts. Their encouragement motivates me to improve. Additionally, sharing music with loved ones creates a warm and joyful atmosphere.

提案: Your answer repeats ideas and has grammatical errors. Try to express your thoughts clearly and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect your points and provide specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it helps relieve stress and improves health. Moreover, singing together can create a sense of community and joy among people.

× I often sing with my friends which makes the perfect experience even more enjoyable and fun.

✓ I often sing with my friends, which makes the perfect experience even more enjoyable and fun.

A comma is needed before 'which' to correctly link the relative clause to the main clause, improving sentence clarity.

× Singing is the different types of songs and especially during gathering, always lift my spirit.

✓ Singing different types of songs, especially during gatherings, always lifts my spirit.

The phrase 'Singing is the different types of songs' is incorrect; it should be 'Singing different types of songs'. Also, 'during gathering' should be 'during gatherings' to indicate plural events. The verb 'lift' should be 'lifts' to agree with the singular subject 'Singing'.

× Yes, when I was a child and I studied in fifth standard, I had one singer, Sir, who is taught me to sing a song and play piano as well as tabla and it is very grateful for me.

✓ Yes, when I was a child and studied in fifth standard, I had a singer, Sir, who taught me to sing songs and play the piano as well as the tabla, and I am very grateful for that.

The verb 'is taught' is incorrect; it should be past tense 'taught' to match the past context. 'One singer' is better as 'a singer'. 'Sing a song' is better as 'sing songs' for generality. 'Play piano' should be 'play the piano'. 'It is very grateful for me' is incorrect; it should be 'I am very grateful for that'.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Whom do you want to sing for?

The correct object pronoun 'whom' should be used instead of 'who' as it is the object of the verb 'want to sing for'.

× Singing for them very special because they are very supportive and appreciate my efforts, which motivates me to perfect better.

✓ Singing for them is very special because they are very supportive and appreciate my efforts, which motivates me to improve.

The sentence is missing the verb 'is' after 'Singing for them'. 'Perfect better' is incorrect; 'improve' is the correct verb here.

× Additionally, sharing music with loved ones creates a warm and joyful atmosphere that.

✓ Additionally, sharing music with loved ones creates a warm and joyful atmosphere.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'that' which is incomplete. Removing 'that' completes the sentence properly.

× Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because singing is very helpful for everyone and it helps to relieve stress and it is very good for health And yes, I think singing can bringing people more happy.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because singing is very helpful for everyone; it helps to relieve stress and is very good for health. And yes, I think singing can bring people more happiness.

The sentence is a run-on and needs proper punctuation. 'Can bringing' is incorrect; it should be 'can bring'. 'More happy' should be 'more happiness' as 'happy' is an adjective and 'happiness' is the noun needed here.