Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat natural but could be more effective by avoiding redundancy and improving sentence structure. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence and support it with concise reasons. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I don't enjoy singing because I find it challenging, but I love listening to songs as they help me relax and improve my mood.

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be improved by using clearer sentence structures and linking words. Avoid repeating the same idea and try to provide specific reasons in a more natural way.

例: I have never learned how to sing properly, so my voice isn't very good. When I try, it sounds unpleasant and might bother others.

提案: Your answer is a bit confusing and contains some grammatical errors. Try to answer directly with a clear topic sentence and support it with relevant details. Avoid unnecessary or negative comments that may seem inappropriate.

例: I don't usually sing for anyone because I am not confident about my voice. However, if I had to, I might sing for close friends or family members.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more fluent and natural by using better linking words and sentence structures. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with specific reasons.

例: Although I haven't tried singing myself, I believe singing can bring happiness because listening to songs helps me feel peaceful and improves my mood, which supports mental well-being.

× I do love songs by the way, it gives me peace and also it freshens the mood.

✓ I do love songs by the way, they give me peace and also they freshen the mood.

The original sentence incorrectly uses singular verbs 'gives' and 'freshens' with the plural subject 'songs'. The verbs should agree in number with the plural subject, so 'give' and 'freshen' are correct.

× But singing not my thing.

✓ But singing is not my thing.

The sentence lacks the verb 'is' which is necessary to complete the sentence structure. Without the verb, the sentence is incomplete and grammatically incorrect.

× as I didn't learn how to sing

✓ as I haven't learned how to sing

The phrase refers to an experience up to the present, so the present perfect tense 'haven't learned' is more appropriate than the simple past 'didn't learn'.

× it creates a very bad environment, disturbing a lot of people.

✓ it creates a very bad environment and disturbs a lot of people.

The original sentence uses a participle phrase 'disturbing a lot of people' which is awkward here. Using 'and disturbs' makes the sentence clearer and grammatically correct.

× I generally don't think and as I stated before my voice is not that good and I didn't learn how to sing.

✓ I generally don't think so, and as I stated before, my voice is not that good and I haven't learned how to sing.

The phrase 'I generally don't think' is incomplete and needs 'so' to complete the thought. Also, commas are needed for clarity, and 'haven't learned' is better than 'didn't learn' for present relevance.

× So there is no one in the gods green earth I would love to sing for I have.

✓ So there is no one in God's green earth I would love to sing for.

The phrase 'I have' at the end is unnecessary and makes the sentence awkward. Also, 'God's' should have an apostrophe to indicate possession.

× If I ever sing for someone it would certainly the person I hate the most.

✓ If I ever sing for someone, it would certainly be the person I hate the most.

The verb 'be' is missing after 'would certainly', and a comma is needed after the conditional clause for correct sentence structure.

× As I didn't try out singing, I don't exactly know it can either bring happiness or not.

✓ As I haven't tried singing, I don't exactly know whether it can bring happiness or not.

The present perfect 'haven't tried' is more appropriate for an experience up to now. Also, 'whether' is needed to introduce the alternative in the second clause.

× But I do listen songs so I can tell that song brings peace and also elevates mood.

✓ But I do listen to songs, so I can tell that songs bring peace and also elevate mood.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' before its object. Also, 'song' should be plural to agree with 'songs' and verbs should be plural accordingly.