Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法の誤りと不自然な表現があります。例えば、「one of the way of to release」は不正確で、「one of the ways to release」や「a way to relieve」とするのが自然です。また、冗長な表現を避け、簡潔に答えることが望ましいです。

例: Yes, I like singing because it is a great way to relieve the stress I accumulate during the day.

提案: 文法の誤りが多く、意味が分かりにくい部分があります。例えば、「I've never」だけでは不完全で、「I've never learnt how to sing」とする必要があります。また、「no need to singing well」は「no need to sing well」と修正し、より自然な表現にしましょう。

例: No, I have never learnt how to sing. I enjoy singing just for fun and don't feel the need to improve my skills.

提案: 内容は良いですが、文が長く繰り返しが見られます。例えば、「tips of how to improve my singing」は「tips on improving my singing」とすると自然です。また、接続詞の使い方を工夫して、より流暢に話しましょう。

例: I want to sing for my girlfriend because she is always kind and gives me helpful tips on improving my singing skills.

提案: 文法と語彙の誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。例えば、「give us some feeling of happy」は「make us feel happy」と言い換え、「essential things for us to being happy」は「essential for our happiness」と修正しましょう。

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because talented singers can make us feel joyful, which is essential for our well-being.

× Yes, I like singing because singing is one of the way of to release my stress accumulated by the day's life.

✓ Yes, I like singing because singing is one of the ways to release my stress accumulated by the day's life.

The phrase 'one of the way' is incorrect because 'one of the' should be followed by a plural noun. Therefore, 'way' should be changed to 'ways'. Also, 'of to release' is incorrect; it should be 'to release'.

× No, I've never.

✓ No, I never have.

The phrase 'I've never' is incomplete and incorrect in this context. The correct form is 'I never have' or 'I have never learned'. The auxiliary verb 'have' should be placed after 'never' in this sentence structure.

× It's enough for me to just singing and no need to singing well.

✓ It's enough for me to just sing and no need to sing well.

After 'to', the base form of the verb should be used, not the '-ing' form. Therefore, 'to just singing' and 'to singing' should be corrected to 'to just sing' and 'to sing' respectively.

× So there are no needs for me to learn how can I improve my singing.

✓ So there is no need for me to learn how I can improve my singing.

The phrase 'there are no needs' is incorrect; it should be 'there is no need' because 'need' is uncountable here. Also, the clause 'how can I improve' should be 'how I can improve' to maintain correct sentence structure.

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Whom do you want to sing for?

In formal English, 'whom' is the correct object pronoun to use after a preposition like 'for'. However, in spoken English, 'who' is often used informally.

× I want to sing for my girlfriend, she's always kind to me when I sing for her and she gives me some tips of how to improve my singing.

✓ I want to sing for my girlfriend; she's always kind to me when I sing for her, and she gives me some tips on how to improve my singing.

The sentence is a run-on and needs proper punctuation. Also, 'tips of how' should be 'tips on how'.

× So I want to sing for her in order to improve my skills of singing.

✓ So I want to sing for her in order to improve my singing skills.

The phrase 'skills of singing' is awkward; the correct form is 'singing skills'.

× Yes, I think so. There are a lot of people who can sing very well and they always give us some feeling of happy.

✓ Yes, I think so. There are a lot of people who can sing very well and they always give us a feeling of happiness.

'Feeling of happy' is incorrect; 'happy' is an adjective and should be replaced with the noun 'happiness'. Also, 'some feeling' is better as 'a feeling' in this context.

× And so it is essential things for us to being happy.

✓ And so it is essential for us to be happy.

'It is essential things' is incorrect; 'it is essential' should be followed by an infinitive or a clause. Also, 'to being happy' should be 'to be happy'.