Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and grammatically correct. Try to use a clear topic sentence and avoid redundancy. For example, instead of 'singing make me more fresh,' say 'singing makes me feel refreshed.' Also, explain briefly why singing helps you remember things to add more detail.

例: Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel refreshed and helps me remember happy memories from my past.

提案: Your answer has good content but needs grammatical corrections and clearer structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct verb forms. For example, say 'My mom took me to a singing course, and I enjoyed it because my teacher was fun and patient.'

例: Yes, I have. My mom took me to a singing course when I was young, and I enjoyed it because my teacher was fun and very patient.

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and has grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to explain. For example, 'I like to sing for myself and my family because we have a karaoke room at home where we often sing together.'

例: I like to sing for myself and my family because we have a karaoke room at home, and we often enjoy singing together there.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words. For example, say 'Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because the lyrics often have meaningful stories that people can relate to.'

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because the lyrics often tell meaningful stories that people can relate to, which makes them feel connected and joyful.

× Yes, I do like singing because for me personally, singing make me more fresh and I can remember a lot of things.

✓ Yes, I do like singing because for me personally, singing makes me feel fresher and I can remember a lot of things.

The verb 'make' should be 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'singing' (third person singular). Also, 'more fresh' is better expressed as 'fresher' to use the correct comparative adjective form.

× Yes I have, at the time my mom took me to sing course and I was enjoy it because my teacher was fun and he was a patient to teach me.

✓ Yes, I have. At that time, my mom took me to a singing course and I enjoyed it because my teacher was fun and he was patient in teaching me.

The phrase 'I was enjoy it' is incorrect; it should be 'I enjoyed it' to use the past tense verb form. Also, 'sing course' should be 'singing course' and 'he was a patient to teach me' should be 'he was patient in teaching me' for correct grammar and natural expression.

× For me, myself and my family, because we have one room in our home, uh, I'm in the room karaoke and then we always sing together in that room.

✓ For me, myself, and my family, because we have one room in our home where I have a karaoke setup, and we always sing together in that room.

The phrase 'I'm in the room karaoke' is incorrect and unclear. It should be rephrased to 'where I have a karaoke setup' to clarify meaning. Also, adding commas after 'me' and 'myself' improves clarity.

× I think yes, because the lyrics have many meanings behind it and not only that, I think some people relate with the story behind it.

✓ I think yes, because the lyrics have many meanings behind them, and not only that, I think some people relate to the story behind them.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect when referring to plural 'lyrics'; it should be 'them'. Also, the verb 'relate with' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'relate to'.