Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and detailed, but you could improve coherence by using linking words to connect your ideas more smoothly. Also, avoid listing too many situations in one sentence to keep it concise.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it's a fun and relaxing activity that helps me express my emotions. For instance, I often sing along to my favorite songs when I'm alone. Additionally, I like singing with friends at parties or during car rides.

提案: Your answer addresses the question well but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use past tense consistently and improve sentence structure for clarity.

例: Yes, I tried to learn how to sing when I was in secondary school because I wanted to play the piano, and singing was one of the prerequisites. Although I practiced for several months, I eventually gave up because I found it difficult to improve my pitch and rhythm.

提案: Your answer is well-structured and detailed. To improve, add linking words to enhance flow and correct minor grammatical errors (e.g., 'a comforting and soothing experience').

例: I would love to sing for my children one day because I believe it creates a special bond between a parent and a child, even before they are born. Moreover, singing can be a comforting and soothing experience that helps strengthen our connection. Additionally, sharing music with them as they grow is a wonderful way to express love and create lasting memories.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but watch capitalization errors ('A joyful') and try to use more varied vocabulary and linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it often creates a joyful and lively atmosphere. For example, during celebrations such as weddings, birthdays, and parties, singing and music help people connect and enjoy the moments together.

× Yes, I try to learn how to sing when I was in secondary school because I wanted to play the piano and singing was one of the prerequisites.

✓ Yes, I tried to learn how to sing when I was in secondary school because I wanted to play the piano and singing was one of the prerequisites.

The sentence describes a past event, so the verb 'try' should be in the past tense 'tried' to maintain correct tense consistency.

× Singing can be comforting and soothing experience that helps strengthen our connection.

✓ Singing can be a comforting and soothing experience that helps strengthen our connection.

The noun 'experience' is singular and countable, so it requires the indefinite article 'a' before it to be grammatically correct.

× Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it often creates A joyful and lively atmosphere.

✓ Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it often creates a joyful and lively atmosphere.

The article 'A' should be lowercase 'a' because it is in the middle of the sentence. Also, articles should be lowercase unless starting a sentence or a proper noun.