Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，如"Seeing"应为"Singing"，且句子结构不够自然。建议注意动词的正确使用，避免拼写错误，并使句子更简洁流畅。

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it makes me feel happy and helps me relax after a stressful day. For example, I often sing my favorite pop songs when I am at home alone.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，句子不完整且表达不清晰。建议练习完整句子表达，注意时态和语法结构，避免重复和断句错误。

例: I learned how to sing when I was in primary school, but after that, I didn't take any formal lessons. Instead, I listened to tapes and tried to imitate the singers.

提案: 回答较长且有语法错误，如"and but now"不连贯。建议简化句子结构，使用连接词使表达更流畅，并注意时态一致。

例: I used to sing for myself, like when I was taking a shower. But now, as a mother of two children, I like to sing for them to make them laugh, and they often imitate my voice.

提案: 回答未完成，缺少具体细节和连贯性。建议补充完整观点，使用连接词使句子连贯，并提供具体原因或例子支持观点。

例: Yes, I definitely believe that singing can bring happiness to people. Music helps us feel less lonely and sad, and it can lift our spirits during difficult times.

× Seeing not only makes me feel happy but also helps me relax after stressful day.

✓ Singing not only makes me feel happy but also helps me relax after a stressful day.

这里的'Seeing'应为'Singing'，因为上下文在谈论唱歌。'Seeing'是现在分词，但用错了词。应使用正确的动词形式表达意思。

× For example, I often see my favorite pop songs when I am at home alone.

✓ For example, I often sing my favorite pop songs when I am at home alone.

这里的'verb 'see'用错了，应该用'sing'表示唱歌。'see'是看，不符合语境。

× I learned how to sing when I was in the primary school, but later I I didn't learn anything how to sing.

✓ I learned how to sing when I was in primary school, but later I didn't learn anything about how to sing.

'in the primary school'中'the'不需要，'primary school'前不加冠词。'anything how to sing'缺少介词'about'。

× I just listened to the tape and I follow the singers and.

✓ I just listened to the tape and I followed the singers.

前半句是过去时，后半句应保持时态一致，改为过去时'followed'。句尾多余'and'应去掉。

× I used to sing for myself, for example, I would sing when I am taking a shower and but now as a mother of two children, I would like to sing for them because I want to make them laugh when I'm singing and they would imitate my voice.

✓ I used to sing for myself; for example, I would sing when I was taking a shower, but now as a mother of two children, I would like to sing for them because I want to make them laugh when I'm singing and they would imitate my voice.

'and but'是错误的连词搭配，应改为'but'。时态应保持一致，'when I am taking a shower'改为过去时'when I was taking a shower'。

× Yes, I definitely believe that singing makes people happier. I can't imagine a world without music. We often suffer from unhappiness, loneliness, and if we have music, we can.

✓ Yes, I definitely believe that singing makes people happier. I can't imagine a world without music. We often suffer from unhappiness and loneliness, but if we have music, we can feel better.

句子结构不完整，'and if we have music, we can.'缺少谓语和宾语，需补充完整表达。