Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần tự nhiên hơn và tránh lặp từ. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, rõ ràng và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy thêm chi tiết cụ thể hơn để làm câu trả lời phong phú hơn.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me express my emotions. I often sing with my friends during karaoke sessions, which is always a lot of fun.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ cho chính xác hơn. Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, tránh lỗi và có cấu trúc tốt hơn. Hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was a young girl as it was part of my school curriculum. We practiced regularly, and I even participated in a local singing competition.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và tránh lặp từ. Câu trả lời cần có cấu trúc rõ ràng hơn và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp. Hãy thêm chi tiết để làm câu trả lời sinh động hơn.

例: I want to sing for my family because I feel comfortable and relaxed when performing in front of them. They usually encourage me, which boosts my confidence.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn còn thiếu rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và hoàn thiện câu trả lời với các chi tiết cụ thể hơn để làm rõ ý.

例: In my opinion, singing can bring happiness to people because it helps relieve pain and stress. When people sing, they often feel more joyful and relaxed.

× It's a fantastic way to do really straight and express those emotions.

✓ It's a fantastic way to relax and express those emotions.

The phrase 'do really straight' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'to relax'. Using the correct adverb or verb improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I love singing with my friend during karaoke session and during during karaoke session.

✓ I love singing with my friends during karaoke sessions.

The noun 'friend' should be plural 'friends' to match the plural 'sessions'. Also, 'during during' is a repetition error. Correct plural forms and remove repetition for grammatical accuracy.

× Yeah, yet I have learned singing when I was a young girl and it was a pack of school subject.

✓ Yeah, I learned singing when I was a young girl and it was part of the school subjects.

The word 'yet' is incorrectly used here; it should be omitted. Also, 'pack of school subject' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'part of the school subjects'. Modal verb 'have' is unnecessary here; simple past 'learned' is appropriate.

× We practice regularly and sometimes I participated in a local singing competition.

✓ We practiced regularly and sometimes I participated in local singing competitions.

The verb 'practice' should be in past tense 'practiced' to match 'participated'. Also, 'competition' should be plural 'competitions' to indicate multiple events or general participation.

× I want to sing for family because I feel comfortable and relax performing in front of them and my family usually encourage, encourage me.

✓ I want to sing for my family because I feel comfortable and relaxed performing in front of them, and my family usually encourages me.

The pronoun 'family' needs the possessive 'my'. The verb 'relax' should be past participle 'relaxed' to describe feeling. The verb 'encourage' should be singular 'encourages' to agree with singular collective noun 'family'. Repetition of 'encourage' is removed.

× In my opinion, I believe that singing can bring happiness to people. It really Enders pain. We can make we can make people happier and.

✓ In my opinion, I believe that singing can bring happiness to people. It really eases pain. We can make people happier.

The word 'Enders' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'eases'. The phrase 'We can make we can make' is a repetition error; it should be 'We can make'. The sentence ending with 'and' is incomplete and should be finished or removed for clarity.