Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally good but could be improved by correcting minor errors and avoiding redundancy. For example, instead of repeating 'singing' multiple times, use pronouns or synonyms. Also, clarify 'school koi' to 'school choir' for accuracy. Try to keep sentences concise and natural.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me feel calm and relaxed. It also allows me to express my emotions and reduce stress after a busy day. Additionally, I was a member of my school's choir, which was a great experience since I am a big fan of music.

提案: Focus on grammar accuracy, especially verb tenses ('have learnt' instead of 'have learn'). Also, avoid repetition and unclear phrases like 'big experience of singing me'. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I have learnt how to sing. As I mentioned, I was a member of our school choir. Moreover, I attended a music school where I learned to play the piano and improve my singing skills. Therefore, I have considerable experience in singing.

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'like' and clarify phrases such as 'close club of people'. Use more precise vocabulary and structure your answer with clear linking words to improve coherence.

例: I am not a big fan of public performances, so I prefer to sing for my family or a small group of close friends. This way, I can express my feelings through songs about my love and appreciation for them.

提案: Your answer is clear and well-structured with good use of examples and linking words. To improve, try to use a wider range of vocabulary and avoid minor grammatical errors such as 'such same effect' (should be 'the same effect').

例: I believe singing can bring happiness to many people, especially music lovers. For instance, hearing a favorite song or singer can uplift their mood and make them feel joyful. However, for those who are not interested in music, singing might not have the same effect.

× Moreover, I was a member of my school koi which was a great experience since I'm big fan of music in general.

✓ Moreover, I was a member of my school choir which was a great experience since I'm a big fan of music in general.

The word 'koi' is likely a typo and should be 'choir'. Also, 'big fan' requires the article 'a' before it because 'fan' is a countable noun. The correct phrase is 'a big fan'.

× Yes, I have learn how to sing and as I said I was a member of our school core and moreover I went to a music school to learn how to play in piano and also how to sing.

✓ Yes, I have learned how to sing and as I said I was a member of our school choir and moreover I went to a music school to learn how to play the piano and also how to sing.

The verb 'learn' in present perfect tense requires the past participle form 'learned'. 'Core' is likely a typo for 'choir'. The phrase 'play in piano' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'play the piano'.

× So yes, I have a big experience of singing me.

✓ So yes, I have a lot of experience in singing.

The phrase 'a big experience' is incorrect; 'experience' is an uncountable noun and should be quantified with 'a lot of'. Also, 'of singing me' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'in singing'.

× I went to a music school to learn how to play in piano and also how to sing.

✓ I went to a music school to learn how to play the piano and also how to sing.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect here; the correct phrase is 'play the piano' without 'in'.

× So I can like express my feelings through one of the songs about my love for them.

✓ So I can express my feelings through one of the songs about my love for them.

The word 'like' is used incorrectly here as a filler and should be omitted for clarity and correctness.