Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“avoid seeing”应为“avoid singing”，“listen musics”应为“listen to music”。建议注意动词搭配和句子连贯性，避免句子碎片化。

例: No, I don't like singing because I'm not very good at it and I lack confidence. Therefore, I avoid singing in front of people. However, I prefer listening to music because it helps me feel relaxed and refreshed.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和用词不当，如“as gross”用法错误，且句子结构不够清晰。建议使用更准确的表达，并注意句子逻辑连贯。

例: No, I have never learned how to sing because when I was a child, people told me I was not a good singer. So, I avoid singing in front of others and don't think it's necessary to take singing lessons.

提案: 回答中存在句子碎片，如“Which is a good way...”应与前句合并。建议使用连词连接句子，使表达更流畅自然。

例: I only want to sing for myself because singing alone helps me avoid embarrassing moments and allows me to relax and feel more confident, which is a good way to escape daily stress and recharge.

提案: 回答中句子结构不完整，使用了多个句子碎片。建议合并句子，使用适当的连接词，使表达更连贯。

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because it stimulates our brains to produce more dopamine, which makes us feel happier, and it also creates a comfortable and relaxing atmosphere that helps us recharge and escape from daily stress.

× I prefer to listen musics.

✓ I prefer to listen to music.

music 是不可数名词，不能加复数形式 musics，应该用单数形式 music。

× So I avoid seeing in front of people.

✓ So I avoid singing in front of people.

这里应该用动词 sing 而不是 see，且 avoid 后面接动名词形式 singing。

× I prefer to listen musics.

✓ I prefer to listen to music.

动词 listen 后面需要加介词 to，表示“听某物”。

× Which makes me recharged and comforted.

✓ This makes me feel recharged and comforted.

句子不能以关系代词 which 开头独立成句，应改为完整句子，并加上动词 feel。

× I have never learned it because when I was a little child, I was told that i'm not a good singer.

✓ I have never learned it because when I was a little child, I was told that I wasn't a good singer.

过去时态中，主句是过去时，宾语从句也应使用过去时态，不能用现在时态。

× i'm not a good singer.

✓ I wasn't a good singer.

句首人称代词 I 应大写，且时态应与上下文一致。

× So I avoid singing any songs in front of people as gross.

✓ So I avoid singing any songs in front of people because I feel embarrassed.

as gross 用法不当，表达尴尬应使用 feel embarrassed。

× Which is a good way to escape from daily stress and recharge myself.

✓ This is a good way to escape from daily stress and recharge myself.

句子不能以 which 开头独立成句，应改为完整句子。

× But also can create a comfortable and relaxing atmosphere.

✓ It can also create a comfortable and relaxing atmosphere.

句子缺少主语，应补充主语 it。

× Which helps us recharge and escape from daily stress.

✓ This helps us recharge and escape from daily stress.

句子不能以 which 开头独立成句，应改为完整句子。