Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'ha' to make your answer sound more natural and fluent. Also, clarify your ideas and avoid confusing phrases like 'express the emotion and relatives.' Use clear and relevant vocabulary, and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it is a wonderful way to express emotions. I often sing during karaoke sessions, and I find it enjoyable to sing with friends who share the same interest.

提案: Focus on clear sentence structure and correct verb usage. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like 'extra relations' and 'planning to launching.' Use linking words to connect ideas logically and provide specific details about your plans.

例: No, I have never had the chance to learn how to sing formally because it was not part of my school curriculum. Also, my family could not afford extra lessons. However, I plan to take singing classes after I finish my exams.

提案: Make sure your sentences are complete and clear. Avoid repetition and confusing phrases. Use linking words to explain your reasons logically and provide specific details about your feelings and your family's reactions.

例: I especially want to sing for my family because I feel comfortable with them. They enjoy listening to my singing, and their support encourages me to pursue my passion.

提案: Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid confusing or incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect your points logically. Provide specific reasons and explain scientific terms simply and accurately.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. When people sing, it helps reduce stress and releases dopamine, which is a hormone that makes us feel happy.

× I like uh, singing because it is a fantastic way to express the emotion and relatives.

✓ I like uh, singing because it is a fantastic way to express emotions and feelings.

The word 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to refer to feelings in general. Also, 'relatives' is incorrect here; likely the intended word is 'feelings' or 'relationships'. Using 'relatives' is incorrect in this context.

× I usually sing a song during the karaoke sessions and it is uh good to sing uh, with a person, ha, having a similar interest.

✓ I usually sing songs during karaoke sessions and it is uh good to sing uh, with people who have similar interests.

The phrase 'a song' and 'a person' should be plural to match the general activity. 'Karaoke sessions' is plural, so 'a song' should be 'songs'. Also, 'a person, ha, having a similar interest' is awkward; it should be 'people who have similar interests' for grammatical correctness and clarity.

× No, I have ever ever not get a chance to learn how to swing.

✓ No, I have never gotten a chance to learn how to sing.

The phrase 'have ever ever not get' is incorrect. The correct form is 'have never gotten' to express that the opportunity has not occurred. Also, 'swing' is a typo; it should be 'sing'.

× This is because the singing was never the part of the curriculum in our schools and my mother did not afford me for the extra relations and I am planning to launching once I complete my examination.

✓ This is because singing was never part of the curriculum in our schools and my mother could not afford extra lessons, and I am planning to start once I complete my examinations.

'The singing' should be 'singing' without 'the'. 'Did not afford me for the extra relations' is incorrect; it should be 'could not afford extra lessons'. 'Planning to launching' is incorrect; it should be 'planning to start'. 'Examination' should be plural 'examinations' to match context.

× I especially want to sing song for my family.

✓ I especially want to sing songs for my family.

'Sing song' is incorrect; it should be 'sing songs' to indicate the activity generally.

× I feel so much comfortable with the family to sing and even the they love to sing the song that I the way I sing and even depression even the encouragement to pursue my passions for the.

✓ I feel very comfortable singing with my family, and they love the way I sing. They also encourage me to pursue my passions.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains pronoun errors like 'the they' and incomplete phrases. Correct pronouns and sentence structure are needed for clarity.

× Yes, I feel it. I feel that singing can bring happiness to the people.

✓ Yes, I feel that singing can bring happiness to people.

'The people' is incorrect here; 'people' without 'the' is more natural when speaking generally.

× This is because during the people when they are seeing the stressless harm on the dopamine is released from their body and it is also known as the one of the happiest hormones from the human body rather than this singing itself start on that will make the.

✓ This is because when people are stressed, dopamine is released from their bodies, and it is known as one of the happiest hormones in the human body. Moreover, singing itself can help with that and make people feel better.

The original sentence has multiple errors including incorrect prepositions ('during the people'), incorrect word choice ('stressless harm'), and incomplete sentence structure. Correct prepositions and clearer phrasing improve understanding.