Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ хороший, но можно улучшить связность и точность выражений. Например, фраза "leaves my mood" не совсем корректна. Лучше использовать более подходящие выражения для описания эмоций и эффектов пения.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and recharge my energy when I feel tired. For example, after a long day, singing my favorite songs lifts my mood and makes me feel refreshed. That's why I love singing so much.

提案: Ответ неполный и содержит грамматические ошибки, например, предложение заканчивается незавершённо. Рекомендуется завершать мысли и использовать более точные выражения, а также избегать повторов.

例: No, I haven't formally learned how to sing because I'm neither a professional nor an amateur singer. However, I enjoy singing casually by imitating my favorite artists and practicing shadowing techniques to improve my voice and pronunciation. This way, I have fun and develop my skills.

提案: Ответ неясен и содержит ошибки, затрудняющие понимание. Рекомендуется использовать простые и чёткие предложения, чтобы выразить свои мысли ясно и логично.

例: If I were a singer, I would love to sing for my mother because she has always supported me and I want to show my appreciation.

提案: Ответ очень неясен и содержит разговорные и неправильные выражения. Рекомендуется использовать более формальный и структурированный язык, а также избегать повторов и неуместных слов.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it allows them to express their emotions and feel joyful, especially when they are in a good mood or want to relax.

× For example, after a long day, singing my favorite songs leaves my mood and makes me feel refreshed.

✓ For example, after a long day, singing my favorite songs lifts my mood and makes me feel refreshed.

The verb 'leaves' is incorrectly used here; the correct verb to express improving mood is 'lifts'. This is a present tense issue where the wrong verb choice affects the meaning.

× However, I do enjoy singing casually by imitating my favorite arts and practicing shadowing techniques to improve my voice and pronunciation. This helps me have fun and develop my.

✓ However, I do enjoy singing casually by imitating my favorite artists and practicing shadowing techniques to improve my voice and pronunciation. This helps me have fun and develop my skills.

The sentence is incomplete and contains a wrong word 'arts' instead of 'artists'. The sentence structure is faulty because it ends abruptly without completing the thought. Correcting the noun and completing the sentence resolves the issue.

× If I were seeing or if I were a singer, of course I would be saying I would sing for my mother. Mother's been.

✓ If I were a singer, of course I would say I would sing for my mother.

The phrase 'If I were seeing' is incorrect and unclear. Also, 'Mother's been' is incomplete and does not make sense. The sentence structure is faulty and needs simplification and correction to convey the intended meaning.

× Sometimes, yes. It's up to people's cravings, moods and et cetera if if a person wanna sing, verily he or she is.

✓ Sometimes, yes. It depends on people's cravings, moods, and so on; if a person wants to sing, then they should.

The sentence uses incorrect pronouns and informal language ('wanna', 'verily he or she is'). Also, 'et cetera' is not used properly. The pronouns and expressions need to be corrected for clarity and grammatical correctness.