Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中表达了不喜欢唱歌的原因，但语言不够自然，句子结构混乱，且有语法错误。建议简化句子，避免重复，使用更自然的表达方式。

例: No, I don't like singing because I am tone deaf. When I was a child, my family laughed at me, so I still feel shy to sing in front of others.

提案: 回答内容较好，但存在语法错误和用词不当（如'seeing'应为'singing'），句子结构不够清晰。建议注意单词拼写，使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I have learned a little about singing from my friend Lily, who once won a couple's singing competition. She taught me how to control my breath and pitch, so I now understand some basic skills.

提案: 回答不完整且表达不清晰，句子结构混乱。建议直接回答问题，补充具体细节，并使用连接词使表达连贯。

例: I would like to sing for my close friends to show how much I miss them. After graduation, we haven't seen each other for a long time, so singing is a way to express my feelings.

提案: 回答表达了观点并给出例子，但存在拼写错误（'seeing'应为'singing'）和用词不当。建议注意拼写，使用更准确的词汇，并使句子更流畅。

例: Definitely, singing is a great way to express love to close friends. For example, at my graduation ceremony, my friend sang some emotional songs for me, which moved me deeply.

× I remember when I was a child my families laughed at my thing, so I still feel a bit of shy to perform my singing in.

✓ I remember when I was a child my family laughed at my singing, so I still feel a bit shy to perform.

这里“families”应为单数“family”，表示“家人”；“thing”用词不当，应改为“singing”；“a bit of shy”应为“a bit shy”，因为“shy”是形容词，不用加“of”。

× I have only learned a little about seeing my friend Lily, who once won the couple's singing competition, taught me how to control my breath and pitch.

✓ I have only learned a little about singing from my friend Lily, who once won the couple's singing competition, and she taught me how to control my breath and pitch.

“seeing”应为“singing”，动词拼写错误；“about seeing my friend Lily”结构不清，应改为“about singing from my friend Lily”；缺少连接词“and she”使句子不完整。

× I'd like to think for my close friends to express how I miss them.

✓ I'd like to sing for my close friends to express how much I miss them.

“think for”用法错误，应为“sing for”；缺少“much”来加强表达“how much I miss them”。

× It is because after graduation we haven't seen each other for a long time, so that the most important thing isn't the songs, but.

✓ It is because after graduation we haven't seen each other for a long time, so the most important thing isn't the songs, but the feelings behind them.

句子结构不完整，缺少“but”后面的内容，导致句意不明，应补充完整。

× Definitely, as I mentioned above, seeing is a great way to express your love to your close friends.

✓ Definitely, as I mentioned above, singing is a great way to express your love to your close friends.

“seeing”应为“singing”，动词拼写错误。

× For instance, in my graduation ceremony, my friend sang some lyric songs for me which moved me very much.

✓ For instance, in my graduation ceremony, my friend sang some lyrical songs for me which moved me very much.

“lyric songs”应为“lyrical songs”，形容词形式错误。