Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中表达不够自然，句子结构复杂且有语法错误，建议使用更简单直接的句子表达观点，并避免重复。

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me express my emotions. For example, singing happy songs can show that I am in a good mood.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够流畅，建议使用正确的时态和更自然的表达方式，同时简洁明了。

例: I have never had formal training, but I taught myself some singing skills. This has allowed me to perform on stage and achieve good results.

提案: 回答内容较好，但句子较长且有语法错误，建议分句表达并注意主谓一致，使表达更清晰自然。

例: If I could choose my audience, I would sing for people with a passive mindset. I believe singing has the power to inspire them and help them develop a more positive attitude towards the future.

提案: 回答中词汇使用不准确，句子结构混乱，建议使用更准确的词汇和简洁的句子表达观点。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness. Music has the power to improve people's mood. For example, singing happy songs can encourage people, while love songs can make them feel loved.

× Yes, singing is a formal part of our human beings arts, which showcase the different feelings about human beings of different situations.

✓ Yes, singing is a formal part of our human arts, which showcase the different feelings about human beings in different situations.

“human beings arts”中“beings”多余，应该用“human arts”表示“人类的艺术”。“human beings”指人类个体，不适合用作形容词修饰“arts”。

× Yes, singing is a formal part of our human beings arts, which showcase the different feelings about human beings of different situations.

✓ Yes, singing is a formal part of our human arts, which showcases the different feelings about human beings in different situations.

主语“which”指代单数“part”，谓语动词应使用单数形式“showcases”，保持主谓一致。

× Yes, singing is a formal part of our human beings arts, which showcase the different feelings about human beings of different situations.

✓ Yes, singing is a formal part of our human arts, which showcases the different feelings about human beings in different situations.

介词“of different situations”应改为“in different situations”，表示“在不同的情境中”。

× I hadn't experienced a formal training but I self-taught myself for some skills which makes me able to perform formally on stages and got some decent outcome.

✓ I haven't experienced formal training but I have self-taught some skills which enable me to perform formally on stages and get some decent outcomes.

“hadn't experienced”时态不合适，应使用现在完成时“haven't experienced”表示至今未经历。“self-taught myself”重复，正确用法是“have self-taught”。“makes me able”应改为“enable me”更自然。

× I hadn't experienced a formal training but I self-taught myself for some skills which makes me able to perform formally on stages and got some decent outcome.

✓ I haven't experienced formal training but I have self-taught some skills which enable me to perform formally on stages and get some decent outcomes.

“a formal training”中“training”不可数，去掉冠词“a”。“got some decent outcome”时态和单复数错误，应改为“get some decent outcomes”。

× I hadn't experienced a formal training but I self-taught myself for some skills which makes me able to perform formally on stages and got some decent outcome.

✓ I haven't experienced formal training but I have self-taught some skills which enable me to perform formally on stages and get some decent outcomes.

“got”是过去式，句子时态应统一为现在完成时或一般现在时，改为“get”。

× If I can choose my audience, I will sing for those who have a passive mindset because I believe singing have its power and by giving my song to them, they may be inspired and have some more positive mindset facing the future.

✓ If I can choose my audience, I will sing for those who have a passive mindset because I believe singing has its power and by giving my song to them, they may be inspired and have a more positive mindset facing the future.

“singing have”主谓不一致，应为“singing has”。“some more positive mindset”中“mindset”是单数，前面用“some”不合适，应改为“a more positive mindset”。

× If I can choose my audience, I will sing for those who have a passive mindset because I believe singing have its power and by giving my song to them, they may be inspired and have some more positive mindset facing the future.

✓ If I can choose my audience, I will sing for those who have a passive mindset because I believe singing has its power and by giving my song to them, they may be inspired and have a more positive mindset about facing the future.

“facing the future”前应加介词“about”或改为“when facing the future”，使表达更自然。

× Yes, I think so. Music has its power, so singing a song for the audience can boost their mindset in some ways. For example, singing some delighted song may make someone encouraged, and sing another kind of song may make people love.

✓ Yes, I think so. Music has its power, so singing a song for the audience can boost their mindset in some ways. For example, singing some delightful songs may encourage someone, and singing another kind of song may make people feel love.

“some delighted song”中“song”应为复数“songs”，且“delighted”形容词用错，应为“delightful”。“make someone encouraged”结构错误，应为“encourage someone”。“sing another kind of song may make people love”表达不完整，应改为“make people feel love”。