Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and clear. Avoid repeating phrases like 'Well' and focus on directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: I don't usually like singing in public, but I enjoy singing alone, especially in the bathroom. I tend to sing when I'm happy or when a song I like comes on, as it helps me remember the lyrics.

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to explain your reasons. Avoid contradictory statements and be specific.

例: I have never learned how to sing because I am not very interested in it. However, if I had the opportunity during my childhood, I might have taken singing lessons.

提案: Try to make your sentences grammatically correct and clearer. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repetition. Also, clarify your points to make your answer more natural and effective.

例: If I were to sing, I would sing for my mother or my boyfriend because they would not judge my singing skills. Instead, they would appreciate the emotions I express through the song.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas more clearly and logically using linking words. Provide specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

例: I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps people relax and feel peaceful, especially during stressful times. Singing can also create a sense of connection among people when they share songs together.

× I love to sing only when I'm very happy or I love any song or whenever I listen to a song, it remembers it memorize.

✓ I love to sing only when I'm very happy or I love any song, or whenever I listen to a song, it reminds me of it.

The phrase 'it remembers it memorize' is incorrect. The verb 'remember' should be used in the present tense with the correct object, and 'memorize' is incorrectly used here. The correct verb is 'reminds me of it' to express that the song brings back memories.

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

In English (India), both 'learnt' and 'learned' are acceptable past participles of 'learn'. However, 'learned' is more commonly used in formal contexts and in American English. Since the question is in present perfect tense, 'learned' fits better here.

× I don't have much interest in singing though I love to listen song but singing was never in my genre.

✓ I don't have much interest in singing though I love to listen to songs, but singing was never in my genre.

The verb 'listen' requires the preposition 'to' when followed by an object. Also, 'song' should be plural 'songs' to match the context.

× Yes, if given a chance, I might have learned in my childhood.

✓ Yes, if given a chance, I might have learned to sing in my childhood.

The verb 'learned' needs an object or an infinitive to complete the meaning. Adding 'to sing' clarifies what the speaker might have learned.

× If I want to do sing, I will sing it for my mother or in front of my boyfriend because there they won't be.

✓ If I want to sing, I will sing for my mother or in front of my boyfriend because there they won't be.

The phrase 'do sing' is incorrect; 'sing' alone suffices. Also, 'sing it for' is better as 'sing for' when referring to performing for someone. The phrase 'because there they won't be' is incomplete and unclear.

× They won't judge me on basis of my singing skills.

✓ They won't judge me on the basis of my singing skills.

The phrase 'on basis of' is missing the definite article 'the'. The correct phrase is 'on the basis of'.

× They will only get get to know about the emotions behind the song.

✓ They will only get to know the emotions behind the song.

The phrase 'get to know about' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'get to know' without 'about' when referring to understanding something.

× As singing provide peace when other people need to pursue their job, I believe that this provide happiness to them.

✓ As singing provides peace when other people need to pursue their jobs, I believe that this provides happiness to them.

The verb 'provide' must agree with the singular subject 'singing', so it should be 'provides'. Also, 'job' should be plural 'jobs' to match 'other people'.

× Their body feels very lighter when they sing and after singing we can get to know about each other.

✓ Their bodies feel much lighter when they sing, and after singing, we can get to know each other.

'Body' should be plural 'bodies' to agree with plural pronoun 'their'. 'Very lighter' is incorrect; 'much lighter' is appropriate. Also, 'get to know about each other' should be 'get to know each other'.