Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は自然ですが、'cause'のような口語表現はフォーマルな場面では避け、理由を明確に述べるために文を整理しましょう。また、感情を表す語彙を増やすと良いです。

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and lifts my mood, making me feel both emotional and cheerful.

提案: 文法ミスや繰り返しが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。理由を明確にし、文を簡潔にまとめる練習をしましょう。

例: No, I haven't learned how to sing, but I would like to because I recently watched a singing audition on TV, and it was very exciting and inspiring.

提案: 文が不明瞭で、意味が伝わりにくいです。主語と動詞の一致に注意し、具体的な状況を簡潔に説明しましょう。

例: I would like to sing for my family because I often sing while cooking, and sometimes my husband joins me, which makes it enjoyable.

提案: 回答が繰り返しで単調です。理由や具体例を加えて、より説得力のある答えにしましょう。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it allows them to express their emotions and connect with others, which creates joy.

× Of course I do 'cause singing makes me relax and it makes me emotional and cheerful, that's why.

✓ Of course I do because singing makes me relaxed and it makes me emotional and cheerful, that's why.

The verb 'relax' should be in the past participle form 'relaxed' to correctly describe the state caused by singing. Using 'makes me relax' implies an action rather than a state, so 'makes me relaxed' is appropriate here.

× No, I haven't, but I I'd like to learn it because I watched some audition program on TV just now.

✓ No, I haven't, but I'd like to learn it because I watched some audition program on TV just now.

The phrase 'I I'd' contains a repetition error. Removing the extra 'I' corrects the sentence. Also, 'watched' is correctly used in past tense to refer to a completed action.

× So just makes me thrill and so exciting even if me, even if I I can do it.

✓ So it just makes me thrilled and so excited, even if I can't do it.

The original sentence lacks a clear subject and has incorrect verb forms. Adding 'it' as the subject and using the correct past participle forms 'thrilled' and 'excited' improves clarity and grammatical correctness. Also, 'even if me' is incorrect; it should be 'even if I can't do it' to express the intended meaning.

× I wonder I'd like to want to sing for my family because I always singing in my hmm during when I was cooking.

✓ I wonder, I'd like to sing for my family because I am always singing in my room when I am cooking.

The phrase 'I always singing' is incorrect; it should be 'I am always singing' to use the present continuous tense properly. Also, 'during when' is incorrect; 'when' alone suffices. 'Hmm' is unclear and replaced with 'room' for clarity.

× Then my husband sometimes join me and make how many?

✓ Then my husband sometimes joins me and we sing together.

The verb 'join' should be 'joins' to agree with the singular subject 'my husband'. The phrase 'make how many?' is unclear and ungrammatical; replacing it with 'we sing together' clarifies the meaning.