Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid repeating similar ideas. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, you can say: "I love singing because it allows me to express my feelings through lyrics, and it helps me relax when I'm stressed."

例: I love singing because it helps me express my feelings through the lyrics. Moreover, it relaxes me whenever I feel stressed or upset.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve grammar. Use linking words to connect your ideas. For example, say: "I have always taught myself to sing. When I was a kid, I used YouTube tutorials to practice vocal cords and breathing control, and I also practiced singing with my sister."

例: I have always learned to sing by myself. For instance, as a child, I watched YouTube tutorials to improve my vocal cords and breathing, and I practiced singing with my sister.

提案: Complete your sentences and avoid unfinished thoughts. Use linking words to explain your reasons clearly. For example: "I want to sing for my little sister because I have often sung to her while growing up. She always gives me honest feedback, which helps me improve."

例: I want to sing for my little sister because I have often sung to her since we were young. She always gives me honest opinions about my singing, which helps me get better.

提案: Improve your vocabulary and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example: "I believe singing brings happiness worldwide. For instance, K-pop groups inspire fans with meaningful lyrics and catchy melodies, which lift spirits and create connections. Therefore, singing is a powerful way to spread joy."

例: I believe singing brings happiness to people everywhere. For example, K-pop groups inspire their fans with meaningful lyrics and catchy tunes, which lift people's spirits and make them feel connected. Thus, singing is a powerful way to spread joy and positive emotions.

× I feel like I can express words or express my feeling through the lyrics that I'm singing.

✓ I feel like I can express words or express my feelings through the lyrics that I'm singing.

The word 'feeling' should be plural 'feelings' because it refers to multiple emotions or sensations, not the continuous action of feeling. Using the plural form correctly matches the intended meaning.

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

'Learnt' is a British English past tense form, while 'learned' is the American English form. Both are correct, but consistency is important. Since the rest of the transcript uses American English spelling (e.g., 'practice'), 'learned' is preferred here.

× I would go to YouTube for tutorial on how to practice my vocal chords, on how to control my breathing so that I can sing better.

✓ I would go to YouTube for tutorials on how to practice my vocal cords and how to control my breathing so that I can sing better.

The word 'tutorial' should be plural 'tutorials' because it refers to multiple lessons. Also, 'vocal chords' is incorrect; the correct term is 'vocal cords'. The preposition 'on' is better replaced with 'and' to connect the two related actions.

× I would practice singing with my sister also.

✓ I would also practice singing with my sister.

The placement of 'also' is better before the verb to improve sentence flow. The original sentence is not grammatically incorrect but can be improved for naturalness.

× I have always sing to her most of the times and she would judge me and give me honest review, honest opinion on my singing as well.

✓ I have always sung to her most of the time, and she would judge me and give me honest reviews and honest opinions on my singing as well.

The verb 'sing' should be in the past participle form 'sung' to correctly follow 'have always'. 'Most of the times' should be 'most of the time' as 'time' is uncountable here. 'Review' and 'opinion' should be plural to match 'honest' and the context.

× For example when I sing bad or had a cracked noise I would.

✓ For example, when I sing badly or have a cracked note, I would...

The adverb 'bad' should be 'badly' to modify the verb 'sing'. 'Had' should be 'have' to maintain present tense consistency. 'Cracked noise' is better expressed as 'cracked note'. The sentence is incomplete and should be finished for clarity.

× I think singing brings a lot of happiness to people all over the world.

✓ I think singing brings a lot of happiness to people all over the world.

This sentence is correct; no change needed.

× For example, K pop groups and boy bands inspire their fans but meaningful lyrics and catchy melodies which can lift people's spirit and make them feel connected.

✓ For example, K-pop groups and boy bands inspire their fans with meaningful lyrics and catchy melodies which can lift people's spirits and make them feel connected.

The preposition 'but' is incorrect here; it should be 'with' to show the means of inspiration. 'People's spirit' should be plural 'spirits' to refer to multiple individuals.

× Oral singing is a powerful way to spread joy and positive emotion.

✓ Oral singing is a powerful way to spread joy and positive emotions.

'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to match 'joy' and to indicate multiple feelings being spread.