Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use more natural phrasing and correct grammar. For example, say "it keeps me calm and relaxed" instead of "it keeps me a calm and relaxed." Also, expand your answer slightly by adding a reason or example to make it more effective and natural.

例: Yes, I love singing because it helps me feel calm and relaxed after a busy day. It’s a great way to express my emotions and relieve stress.

提案: Avoid negative or contradictory statements. If you love singing, saying it is boring is confusing. Also, use correct verb tenses and more natural expressions. Try to explain your answer clearly and politely.

例: No, I have never taken singing lessons because I prefer to sing just for fun rather than professionally. However, I enjoy singing in my free time.

提案: Use more natural and precise vocabulary. For example, "lovable" can be replaced with "loving" or "dear." Also, avoid repeating words like "very" twice in a sentence. Try to add linking words to improve coherence.

例: I want to sing for my husband because he is the most loving and supportive person in my life, and spending time with him always brings me joy.

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure. For example, say "because it is a way the world connects musically" and "people enjoy singing." Also, add more specific reasons or examples to support your answer.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it allows them to express their feelings and connect with others through music, which creates a sense of joy and unity.

× Yes, I love singing because it keeps me a calm and relaxed.

✓ Yes, I love singing because it keeps me calm and relaxed.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before the adjectives 'calm' and 'relaxed'. These adjectives describe the state of the subject and do not require an article. Removing 'a' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× No, I don't even learn how to sing because I found that singing is not interesting.

✓ No, I haven't even learned how to sing because I found that singing is not interesting.

The present perfect tense 'haven't learned' is appropriate here to indicate an action that has not occurred up to now. Also, 'learn' should be in past participle form 'learned' after 'have/has'. This correction aligns with the question's tense and meaning.

× It's a boring part of my life.

✓ It's a boring part of my life.

This sentence is correct as is; no correction needed.

× I want to sing for my husband because he is the most lovable person in my life and he is very supportive and very enjoyable person I have ever met.

✓ I want to sing for my husband because he is the most lovable person in my life and he is a very supportive and enjoyable person I have ever met.

The adjective 'enjoyable' needs an article 'a' before it when used to describe 'person'. Also, adding 'a' before 'very supportive' is necessary to maintain parallel structure and correct grammar.

× Yes, singing can bring happiness to people because this is the way that the world connect musically and the people enjoy to sing.

✓ Yes, singing can bring happiness to people because this is the way that the world connects musically and people enjoy singing.

The verb 'connect' should be in third person singular form 'connects' to agree with the singular subject 'world'. The phrase 'enjoy to sing' is incorrect; 'enjoy' is followed by a gerund, so it should be 'enjoy singing'. Also, 'the people' can be simplified to 'people' for natural expression.