Singing— Part 1 採点レポート
会話
Part 1
試験官
Do you like singing? Why?
受験者
Personally, I love to sing, it just refreshes my mind and it brings a sense of happiness. I try to sing as much as possible but due to my hectic schedule, I'm not able to do so.
試験官
Have you ever learnt how to sing?
受験者
When I was 8 years old, my mother enrolled me in a music class where I trained for two years. Although I enjoyed my time there, I couldn't complete my lessons because at that time I had to balance both my badminton career and studies. So.
試験官
Who do you want to sing for?
受験者
To be honest, I really am an introverted person so I think singing personally is something which I do for myself and I don't think I would be comfortable singing in front of others, but if I do get an opportunity I would.
試験官
Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?
受験者
I believe it totally depends on the person. While some people do find happiness in singing as it relieves the stress, others cope with their tension in other ways such as doing exercise or meditation.
評価
総合
Part 1
Do you like singing? Why?
スコア: 85.0提案: Your answer is natural and clear, but try to avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas and use linking words to improve coherence. Also, keep your answer within 5 sentences for better effectiveness.
例: Yes, I love singing because it refreshes my mind and brings me happiness. However, due to my hectic schedule, I don't get to sing as often as I'd like.
Have you ever learnt how to sing?
スコア: 80.0提案: Your answer is relevant but incomplete and ends abruptly. Try to complete your thoughts and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, avoid short or incomplete sentences.
例: Yes, I started learning to sing when I was 8 years old, as my mother enrolled me in a music class. I trained there for two years, but I couldn't complete the lessons because I had to balance my badminton career and studies at that time.
Who do you want to sing for?
スコア: 75.0提案: Your answer is honest but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to make your point clearly with fewer words and use linking words to connect ideas logically.
例: I am quite introverted, so I usually sing for myself. However, if I get an opportunity, I would be willing to sing in front of others.
Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?
スコア: 90.0提案: Good answer with clear opinion and supporting details. To improve, you can add linking words to enhance coherence and use more specific examples.
例: I believe it depends on the person; while some find happiness in singing because it relieves stress, others prefer coping methods like exercise or meditation.
文法
× Personally, I love to sing, it just refreshes my mind and it brings a sense of happiness.
✓ Personally, I love to sing because it just refreshes my mind and brings a sense of happiness.
The original sentence is a comma splice, joining two independent clauses with only a comma. This is incorrect sentence structure. Using 'because' properly connects the clauses, making the sentence grammatically correct.
× So.
The word 'So.' is a sentence fragment and does not form a complete sentence. It should be removed or completed to avoid sentence structure errors.
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