Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và mạch lạc. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể và sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp để diễn đạt ý tưởng của mình một cách tự nhiên và hiệu quả.

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me express my emotions and relax. For example, I often sing my favorite songs when I feel stressed, which makes me feel happier.

提案: Bạn cần trả lời rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng cấu trúc câu đúng ngữ pháp. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi và cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể để làm câu trả lời thêm phong phú và dễ hiểu.

例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons. However, my mother used to sing lullabies to me every night when I was a child, which helped me develop a love for singing.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn không rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng câu đơn giản và rõ ràng, đồng thời cung cấp thêm chi tiết cụ thể để làm câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I would like to sing for my family and friends because they always support me. Also, I dream of singing with famous singers like Son Tung M-TP from Vietnam or members of the group Twice from Korea.

提案: Bạn đã trả lời đúng trọng tâm câu hỏi nhưng câu trả lời còn đơn giản và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Hãy sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể để làm rõ ý.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it helps them relax and forget their worries. For instance, after a long day at work or school, singing my favorite songs always makes me feel joyful and refreshed.

× Yes, I like singing because I feel lyric and beast and I prefer dancing in the and I'm singing in my concert and things like hi.

✓ Yes, I like singing because I feel lyrical and best, and I prefer dancing, and I sing in my concert and things like that.

The words 'lyric' and 'beast' are incorrect here; 'lyrical' is the correct adjective to describe feelings related to lyrics, and 'best' is the correct adjective instead of 'beast'. Also, the phrase 'in the and' is incomplete and unclear, so it was corrected to 'and'. The sentence structure was improved for clarity.

× Hmm I I never learn to sing bigger in a child.

✓ Hmm, I never learned to sing when I was a child.

The verb 'learn' should be in the past tense 'learned' to indicate a completed action in the past. Also, 'bigger in a child' is incorrect; it should be 'when I was a child' to express the time frame.

× My mother, my mother all the way. Sing to song with my with me after school, after bed.

✓ My mother, my mother always sang songs with me after school and before bed.

The phrase 'all the way' is incorrect here; 'always' is the correct adverb to express frequency. 'Sing to song with my with me' is ungrammatical; it should be 'sang songs with me'. Also, 'after bed' is incorrect; 'before bed' is the correct expression.

× Uh, I think I want to sing with my Big Fool singer film in Vietnam and I think I like singing the singing with my dad Hung Twice the group in Korea.

✓ Uh, I think I want to sing with my favorite singer in Vietnam, and I like singing with my dad Hung, who is in the group Twice in Korea.

'Big Fool singer film' is unclear and incorrect; it was corrected to 'favorite singer'. The phrase 'singing the singing with my dad Hung Twice the group' is ungrammatical; it was corrected to 'singing with my dad Hung, who is in the group Twice'. This clarifies the meaning and corrects pronoun and article usage.

× Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because when people singing some they they feel happy and relaxed after work and school.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because when people sing, they feel happy and relaxed after work and school.

The verb 'singing' after 'when people' is incorrect; it should be the base form 'sing' because 'when' clauses require the base verb form. Also, 'some' is unnecessary and removed for clarity.