Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在词汇使用错误，如"habitat"和"mode"，应分别为"habit"和"mood"。句子结构不够清晰，表达重复且不连贯。建议使用简单且准确的词汇，避免重复，并且保持句子简洁明了。

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it is a good habit that helps me feel more excited. When I am stressed, singing helps me to relax and relieve my stress.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整的问题，如"Practice how to sing in the future"不完整且不自然。建议使用完整句子，表达清晰，并注意时态和语法的正确使用。

例: Actually, I have never formally learned how to sing, but I really want to practice singing in the future because I enjoy it and it can boost my mood.

提案: 回答中有重复词汇"because because"，且句子结构不够流畅。建议避免重复，使用连贯的句子，并且表达更具体的原因。

例: This reminds me of my friend Lee, who is a rapper and very cool. I want to sing for her because it helps me release stress and feel more relaxed.

提案: 回答中"seeing"应为"singing"，且"more happier"是语法错误，应为"happier"。建议注意词汇拼写和语法，使用准确的表达。

例: Yes, I think singing can make people happier because it is a good habit that boosts their mood. It helps relieve stress and makes people feel relaxed, especially after a busy day.

× Yes, I really enjoy singing because it's a good habitat which can make me more exciting and I think its behavior can boost my mode.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy singing because it's a good habit which can make me more excited and I think its behavior can boost my mood.

这里'exciting'是形容词，意思是令人兴奋的，应该用形容词'excited'来表达'我感到兴奋'的意思；'mode'是拼写错误，正确单词是'mood'，表示情绪。应使用'excited'和'mood'。

× When I when I have more stress, I will sink into relieve my stress.

✓ When I have more stress, I will try to relieve my stress.

句中'sink into relieve'搭配错误，应该用动词短语'try to relieve'来表达缓解压力的意思。去掉多余的重复'when I'。

× Actually, I have never formally learned how to sing, but I really want to.

✓ Actually, I have never formally learned how to sing, but I really want to learn.

句子末尾缺少动词，'want to'后面应接动词原形，补充'learn'使句子完整。

× Practice how to sing in the future because I really enjoy seeing it which can boost my mood so.

✓ I want to practice singing in the future because I really enjoy it, which can boost my mood.

原句结构混乱，'Practice how to sing'应改为'I want to practice singing'；'seeing it'应为'enjoy it'；调整句子顺序使其通顺。

× Oh this reminds my friend Lee.

✓ Oh, this reminds me of my friend Lee.

动词'remind'后应接间接宾语和介词短语，正确表达为'reminds me of'，表示'让我想起'。

× I really want to sing for her because because during this time I can release my stress and make me more relax realized.

✓ I really want to sing for her because during this time I can release my stress and feel more relaxed.

'make me more relax realized'结构错误，应改为'feel more relaxed'，'relaxed'为形容词，表示放松的状态。

× Yes, I do think seeing can make people more happier because it's a good habit to make people boost their mood during this time.

✓ Yes, I do think singing can make people happier because it's a good habit to boost their mood during this time.

'seeing'应为'singing'；'more happier'是比较级重复错误，应为'happier'；'make people boost'改为'boost'更自然。

× They can relieve their stress and make their feel relaxed, especially after a busy day.

✓ They can relieve their stress and feel relaxed, especially after a busy day.

'make their feel relaxed'结构错误，应去掉'make their'，直接用'verb + adjective'结构'feel relaxed'。