Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more concise and natural. Avoid redundancy such as "to be honest with you" and "somehow". Also, the phrase "I really prefer to see our favorite songs together" is unclear and awkward. Try to use more precise vocabulary and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relieve stress and express my emotions. Moreover, I love singing with my friends, especially when we perform our favorite songs together, which makes the experience more enjoyable.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains some unclear phrases like "ability to see" which affects clarity. Also, the sentence structure is a bit repetitive. Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be more specific about your feelings or reasons.

例: No, I have never taken singing lessons because I lack confidence to sing in front of others. Therefore, I haven't tried to improve my singing skills formally.

提案: Your answer is relevant and includes specific details, but filler words like "umm" and "you know" reduce fluency. Also, the answer could be more concise and structured with a clear topic sentence and supporting details linked logically.

例: I haven't thought much about it, but I enjoy singing lullabies for my little cousin. He seems to like it, so I often sing for him whenever I have free time.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but is incomplete and somewhat repetitive. Avoid vague phrases like "it's a matter of taste" without elaboration. Use linking words to connect your points and complete your sentences for clarity.

例: I believe singing can bring happiness to many people because it helps relieve stress and express emotions. Whether someone is feeling sad or happy, singing allows them to share their feelings in a positive way.

× I really prefer to see our favorite songs together.

✓ I really prefer to sing our favorite songs together.

The verb 'prefer' is typically followed by the base form of the verb or the '-ing' form when expressing preference for an action. However, 'see' is incorrect in this context because you cannot 'see' songs; the intended meaning is to 'sing' songs. Therefore, replacing 'see' with 'sing' corrects the meaning and usage.

× I might not have enough ability to see.

✓ I might not have enough ability to sing.

The verb 'see' is incorrectly used here. The intended meaning is related to singing ability, so 'sing' should be used instead of 'see'. This corrects the verb to match the intended action.

× I never tried singing lessons either.

✓ I never tried taking singing lessons either.

The verb 'try' when followed by a noun phrase usually requires a gerund or a verb phrase. 'Singing lessons' is a noun phrase, but 'try singing lessons' is awkward. The correct expression is 'try taking singing lessons' to indicate the action of attending lessons.

× I start to sing some lullabies for my umm, little cousin and he really enjoys it.

✓ I start singing some lullabies for my umm, little cousin and he really enjoys it.

After 'start', both the infinitive ('to sing') and the gerund ('singing') are possible, but the gerund is more natural in this context. Using 'start singing' sounds more fluent and idiomatic.

× It's really.

✓ It's really enjoyable.

The sentence 'It's really.' is incomplete and lacks a complement or adjective to complete the thought. Adding an adjective like 'enjoyable' completes the sentence and conveys the intended meaning.

× it's a traditional way in order to relieve your stress and also express your feelings.

✓ it's a traditional way to relieve your stress and also express your feelings.

The phrase 'in order to' is redundant when used with 'way'. The correct expression is 'a way to do something'. Removing 'in' makes the sentence grammatically correct and more natural.

× you can express your.

✓ you can express yourself.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'your', which is a possessive pronoun and requires a noun to follow. The correct reflexive pronoun here is 'yourself' to indicate expressing one's own feelings.