Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but a bit long and contains some grammatical errors. Try to keep your answer concise within 5 sentences and use correct grammar, for example, say "I really enjoy singing" instead of "I am really enjoying singing". Also, avoid redundancy and improve sentence flow by using linking words like "because" or "so".

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax after a long day. Although I'm not very good at it, singing my favorite songs quietly at home always lifts my mood.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains some repetition and minor errors, such as "the same courses course". Try to avoid repeating words and use linking words like "and" or "also" to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, be careful with word choice and sentence structure to make your answer more natural.

例: No, I haven't taken any singing classes because I'm shy about my voice and prefer to keep it private. Also, singing courses are quite expensive, so I usually practice on my own.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes and incomplete sentences, such as "I usually want to" and "Keep it pricing". Try to organize your ideas clearly with complete sentences and use linking words to connect your points. Also, check your vocabulary to avoid incorrect words.

例: I prefer singing alone because I feel more comfortable practicing by myself. Since I'm shy about my singing voice, I don't like performing for others. Keeping it private helps me enjoy singing without feeling nervous.

提案: Your answer has good content but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "with the worrying about others opinions" and "prove their mood". Try to use correct expressions like "without worrying about others' opinions" and "improve their mood". Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it allows people to express their emotions freely without worrying about others' opinions. For example, many enjoy singing along to their favorite songs at home or with friends, which helps them feel more relaxed and improves their mood.

× Yes, I am really enjoying singing even though I am not very good at it, but I found it relaxing activity that's helped me feel more comfortable and happy, especially after a long day.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy singing even though I am not very good at it, but I find it a relaxing activity that helps me feel more comfortable and happy, especially after a long day.

The use of 'am really enjoying' suggests a temporary action, but here the speaker is talking about a general preference, so simple present 'really enjoy' is more appropriate. Also, 'found' should be 'find' to match present tense. 'Relaxing activity' needs an article 'a'. 'That's helped' should be 'that helps' to maintain present tense and subject-verb agreement.

× Yes, I am really enjoying singing even though I am not very good at it, but I found it relaxing activity that's helped me feel more comfortable and happy, especially after a long day.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy singing even though I am not very good at it, but I find it a relaxing activity that helps me feel more comfortable and happy, especially after a long day.

The noun 'activity' is countable and singular, so it requires the indefinite article 'a' before it.

× Sometimes I sing low to my favorite songs at home which always lifts my mood.

✓ Sometimes I sing along to my favorite songs at home which always lifts my mood.

The phrase 'sing low to' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'sing along to' when referring to singing with the music.

× No, I haven't taken any singing classes because I'm very shy about my voice and I prefer to keep it private.

✓ No, I haven't taken any singing classes because I'm very shy about my voice and I prefer to keep it private.

No correction needed here as the tense and grammar are correct.

× Another reason is that the same courses course is quite expensive, so I prefer to practice.

✓ Another reason is that the singing courses are quite expensive, so I prefer to practice.

The phrase 'the same courses course' is incorrect and confusing. It should be 'the singing courses' (plural) to match the context. Also, 'courses' is plural, so the verb should be 'are'.

× I prefer singing alone because I feel more comfortable practicing by myself. I'm quite shy about singing voice so I usually want to. I don't want to perform for others. Keep it pricing helps me enjoy singing without feeling nervous.

✓ I prefer singing alone because I feel more comfortable practicing by myself. I'm quite shy about my singing voice, so I usually want to keep it private. I don't want to perform for others. Keeping it private helps me enjoy singing without feeling nervous.

'Singing voice' needs a possessive pronoun 'my'. The sentence 'I usually want to.' is incomplete and unclear; it should be 'I usually want to keep it private.' 'Keep it pricing' is incorrect; it should be 'Keeping it private' to function as the subject of the sentence.

× Yes, I believe singing can definitely bring happiness to people because it allows them to express their emotions freely with the worrying about others opinions.

✓ Yes, I believe singing can definitely bring happiness to people because it allows them to express their emotions freely without worrying about others' opinions.

The phrase 'with the worrying about others opinions' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'without worrying about others' opinions'. Also, 'others opinions' needs an apostrophe to show possession: 'others' opinions'.

× For example, many people enjoy singing along to their favorite song at home or with friends, which help them feel more relaxed and prove their mood.

✓ For example, many people enjoy singing along to their favorite songs at home or with friends, which helps them feel more relaxed and improve their mood.

'Favorite song' should be plural 'favorite songs' to agree with 'many people'. The verb 'help' should be 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'which' referring to the whole preceding clause. 'Prove their mood' is incorrect; it should be 'improve their mood'.