Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and directly responds to the question, but it could be more natural and detailed. Try to avoid redundancy and add a bit more explanation to make your answer richer. For example, explain why you want to be a singer or what singing means to you.

例: Yes, I enjoy singing a lot because it allows me to express my emotions. In fact, I hope to become a professional singer in the future and share my passion with others.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use correct verb forms and clearer expressions. Also, add linking words to improve coherence.

例: I have never taken professional singing lessons, but I have tried to learn by myself by watching tutorials on YouTube.

提案: Your answer has several grammatical mistakes and is somewhat repetitive. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: When I am older and become a professional singer, I would love to sing for my friends because it is my dream. I hope I can fulfill this goal one day.

提案: Your answer shows good ideas but is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your thoughts more clearly and use linking words to organize your answer logically. Avoid redundancy and incorrect phrases.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. It allows singers to express their feelings freely, and it can also cheer up those who are feeling sad or depressed.

× I do like to sing because in the future I would like to be a singer.

✓ I do like to sing because in the future I want to be a singer.

The modal verb 'would like' is used for polite requests or hypothetical situations. Here, expressing a future desire, 'want to' is more direct and appropriate.

× I never learned how to sing by a professional, but I have tried them myself watching tutorials on YouTube.

✓ I have never learned how to sing from a professional, but I have tried myself by watching tutorials on YouTube.

The present perfect tense 'have never learned' is appropriate for experiences up to now. Also, 'from a professional' is the correct preposition, and 'tried them myself' is incorrect; it should be 'tried myself' or 'tried it myself'.

× I never learned how to sing by a professional, but I have tried them myself watching tutorials on YouTube.

✓ I have never learned how to sing from a professional, but I have tried myself by watching tutorials on YouTube.

The preposition 'by' is incorrect here; 'from' is used to indicate the source of learning.

× I hope when I be older and become a professional singer I can sing for my friends because it my it is my dream and I hope I can fulfill it.

✓ I hope when I am older and become a professional singer, I can sing for my friends because it is my dream and I hope I can fulfill it.

The verb 'be' should be in the present tense 'am' to agree with the subject 'I' in this context.

× I hope when I be older and become a professional singer I can sing for my friends because it my it is my dream and I hope I can fulfill it.

✓ I hope when I am older and become a professional singer, I can sing for my friends because it is my dream and I hope I can fulfill it.

The sentence is run-on and confusing; adding commas and correcting word order improves clarity.

× I do think that singing can bring happiness to people. It can bring happiness to singers as they could express themselves for more freely, but also they can make happy people who may be in depression or have another problems to end can make them.

✓ I do think that singing can bring happiness to people. It can bring happiness to singers as they can express themselves more freely, and it can also make people who may be depressed or have other problems happy.

The preposition 'for' before 'more freely' is incorrect; it should be omitted. Also, the phrase 'make happy people' is incorrect; the correct structure is 'make people happy'. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.