Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时语法和表达需更自然流畅，避免重复和语法错误。可以简洁明了地表达喜欢唱歌的原因，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and boosts my energy. Singing is one of my favorite hobbies, and I always feel happier after I sing.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够简洁。建议用更自然的表达方式说明学习经历和放弃原因，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: I took professional singing classes from childhood until middle school, but I eventually gave up because it was quite difficult for me. However, I still love singing as a hobby.

提案: 回答中语法和表达不完整，句子不连贯。建议用完整句子表达想为谁唱歌及原因，避免口语化缩写，使用连接词使表达更清晰。

例: I would like to sing for my middle school singing teacher because she taught me a lot. She helped me become more confident and showed me that I shouldn't be afraid to express myself in front of others.

提案: 回答表达较为笼统，句子结构不够清晰。建议用更具体的例子和连贯的句子说明唱歌如何带来快乐。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because songs have different melodies and moods. People can relate their own experiences to these songs, which makes them feel joyful and connected.

× Also singing is one of my hobby.

✓ Also singing is one of my hobbies.

这里的'hobby'应该用复数形式'hobbies'，因为前面用了'one of my'，表示在多个爱好中的一个，名词应为复数。

× When I sing I've I always feel less stressful and get more energy of it.

✓ When I sing, I always feel less stressed and get more energy from it.

'I've I'是错误的表达，应去掉多余的'I've'。'stressful'是形容词，表示令人有压力的，正确表达感受时应使用过去分词形容词'stressed'。'get more energy of it'中介词应为'from'，表示从某物获得能量。

× I learned the professional class for how to sing when I was a child until middle school, but I give up.

✓ I learned professional singing classes when I was a child until middle school, but I gave up.

时态不一致，前半句用过去时'learned'，后半句应保持过去时，故用'gave up'。另外，'the professional class for how to sing'表达不自然，改为'professional singing classes'更合适。

× so I gave up of learning but I still love to sing as a hobby.

✓ so I gave up learning but I still love to sing as a hobby.

'give up'后面直接接动名词，不需要介词'of'，因此应去掉'of'。

× Who do you want to sing for?

✓ Who do you want to sing for?

此句无语法错误，符合口语习惯。

× I wanna sing for my singing teacher when I was in middle school because she taught me a lot.

✓ I wanted to sing for my singing teacher when I was in middle school because she taught me a lot.

句子时态应与时间状语一致，'when I was in middle school'表示过去，动词应使用过去时'wanted'。

× She taught me how to become a confident girl and let me know that I don't need to. Afraid of showing up of yourself to others?

✓ She taught me how to become a confident girl and let me know that I don't need to be afraid of showing myself to others.

句子断开且结构不完整，'I don't need to.'后面缺少内容，应与后句合并。'Afraid of showing up of yourself to others?'表达不正确，'showing up'和'of yourself'用法错误，改为'showing myself to others'更自然。

× Yes, I always think singing can bring happiness to people.

✓ Yes, I always think singing can bring happiness to people.

此句时态和语法正确，无需修改。

× The reason is the song has different melodies and has different moods of each song and people's experience and their stories can match with the melodies, so I think.

✓ The reason is that songs have different melodies and moods, and people's experiences and stories can match the melodies, so I think so.

'the song'应改为复数'songs'，因为后文提到多个旋律和情绪。'match with'中'with'多余，'match'后直接接宾语即可。'people's experience'应为复数'experiences'以对应多样性。句尾'so I think'不完整，改为'so I think so'更自然。