Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了喜欢唱歌的原因，但存在一些语言错误和用词不当，如“Seeing”应为“Singing”。建议注意单词拼写和语法的准确性，同时避免重复表达。

例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my feelings. For instance, when I'm happy or excited, I often sing pop songs, which enhance my mood and help me relieve stress.

提案: 回答中出现了无关内容“Why was the child around 7 or 8 years old?”，影响了表达的连贯性。建议回答时紧扣问题，避免无关插入，并注意时态一致。

例: Yes, I started learning to sing when I was about 7 or 8 years old. I attended a music school where the lessons helped me improve my voice and build confidence. It was a valuable experience that deepened my passion for music.

提案: 回答中出现了无关和不连贯的句子，如“Why was the child?”和“Think for them now makes me feel happy and grateful and show my appearance for theirs.”，影响理解。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免语法错误和无关内容。

例: I want to sing for my parents and sister because they have always supported me. Although I used to be shy about singing in public, their encouragement gave me confidence. Singing for them now makes me feel happy and grateful.

提案: 回答中存在拼写错误和不恰当的词汇搭配，如“Seeing”应为“Singing”，“in the real estate”不合适。建议使用准确的词汇表达，并注意句子结构的完整性。

例: Yes, definitely. Singing is a wonderful way to express our emotions. For example, when I feel sad or stressed, I like to sing different types of songs, which helps me feel better and more relaxed.

× Seeing is a great way to release stress and enjoy myself.

✓ Singing is a great way to release stress and enjoy myself.

句中'Seeing'应为'Singing'，因为上下文讨论的是唱歌，'seeing'（看见）与语境不符。此处应使用动名词形式表示活动。

× Why was the child around 7 or 8 years old?

✓ I was around 7 or 8 years old.

句子中'Why was the child...'不符合语境，且语法错误。应直接陈述自己年龄，使用过去时'I was...'。

× because it helps me improve my voice and gain confidence.

✓ because it helped me improve my voice and gain confidence.

描述过去经历时，动词应使用过去时态，'helps'应改为'helped'以保持时态一致。

× Why was the child?

✓ I wasn't confident or brave enough to sing in public,

句子'Why was the child?'不合语境且无意义，应改为表达自己过去不自信的句子，使用过去时态。

× Think for them now makes me feel happy and grateful and show my appearance for theirs.

✓ Thinking of them now makes me feel happy and grateful and shows my appreciation for them.

句子结构错误，'Think'应为动名词'Thinking'，且谓语动词需与主语一致，'show'应改为'shows'。'appearance for theirs'表达不当，应改为'appreciation for them'。

× Seeing it's a wonderful way to express our emotions in the real estate.

✓ Singing is a wonderful way to express our emotions in real life.

'Seeing'应为'Singing'，且'in the real estate'表达错误，应为'in real life'。

× For example, when I would when I feel depressed or in bad mood, I like to sing different kinds of songs, which helps me feel better and more relaxed.

✓ For example, when I feel depressed or in a bad mood, I like to sing different kinds of songs, which help me feel better and more relaxed.

句中'double when'重复，应删去一个。'in bad mood'前应加冠词'a'。'which helps'中的'helps'应改为'help'，因为先行词是复数'songs'。