Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên nhưng nên tránh sử dụng từ viết tắt không chính thức như 'cause. Bạn nên mở rộng câu trả lời bằng cách thêm chi tiết cụ thể hơn để làm câu trả lời hiệu quả hơn và tránh lặp lại ý.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and allows me to express my emotions freely, which makes me feel happy and peaceful.

提案: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các câu không hoàn chỉnh và từ viết tắt không chính thức như 'cause. Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, mạch lạc và có cấu trúc tốt hơn. Hãy thêm liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tránh lặp từ.

例: No, I have never taken any singing lessons because I don't consider myself very talented. However, I enjoy singing casually to relax and express my feelings.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý tưởng tốt nhưng cần tránh dùng từ viết tắt và câu hơi dài, khó hiểu. Bạn nên chia câu thành các phần rõ ràng và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I would like to sing for my family because I feel comfortable expressing my emotions around them, and they appreciate my singing more than others.

提案: Câu trả lời thiếu rõ ràng và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng không phù hợp. Bạn nên sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, tránh dùng từ không chính xác và thêm các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it helps reduce stress, allows people to express their emotions, and motivates them to do their best while enjoying life.

× I love singing 'cause while singing I can feel relaxed and enjoy the moment.

✓ I love singing because while singing I can feel relaxed and enjoy the moment.

The use of 'cause' is informal and should be replaced with 'because' for proper grammar and clarity.

× Honestly I have never tried to learn any singing lessons 'cause I'm not good at it.

✓ Honestly, I have never tried to take any singing lessons because I'm not good at it.

The phrase 'tried to learn any singing lessons' is incorrect; 'take any singing lessons' is the correct collocation. Also, 'cause' should be 'because' for formal correctness.

× So I just try my best to feel relaxed and just express my emotion while singing.

✓ So I just try my best to feel relaxed and just express my emotions while singing.

The word 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' because it refers to feelings in general.

× Like just enjoy it, not want to.

✓ I just want to enjoy it, not perform well.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. It needs a subject and verb to form a complete sentence and clarify the meaning.

× I want to sing for my family 'cause when I'm with them, my emotions express freely and they can enjoy my voice, while some others around me cannot like that.

✓ I want to sing for my family because when I'm with them, I can express my emotions freely and they can enjoy my voice, unlike some others around me.

The phrase 'my emotions express freely' is incorrect; emotions cannot express themselves, the subject 'I' should be used. Also, 'cannot like that' is unclear and should be rephrased for clarity.

× Up 'cause is we've been happiness to people, 'cause it's reduced stress, it make you express your emotion more, it motivates you to charge your best and also other ways for you to enjoy the world.

✓ Singing can bring happiness to people because it reduces stress, helps you express your emotions more, motivates you to do your best, and provides other ways to enjoy the world.

The original sentence is grammatically incorrect and unclear. It needs restructuring to form a coherent and grammatically correct sentence.