Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在词汇错误（如"seeing"应为"singing"），且句子结构不够自然，表达重复且不够简洁。建议加强基础词汇的准确使用，避免重复表达，并注意句子通顺。

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and relieve stress. For instance, when I feel overwhelmed by my studies, I listen to my favorite songs to improve my mood.

提案: 回答中有较多的语气词（如"umm"）影响流畅性，且表达不够简洁。建议减少语气词的使用，增强句子连贯性，并使用更准确的词汇表达。

例: Actually, I have never attended a professional singing class, but I learned some techniques by imitating actors and actresses in TV shows and movies.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，句子结构混乱。建议注意句子结构的完整性，避免重复和不必要的词汇，表达更清晰。

例: I want to sing for my mom because she loves music but cannot sing well. Singing her favorite songs would make her very happy and show my appreciation and love.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和词汇使用不当（如"see"应为"listen to"），且表达不够连贯。建议加强语法基础，使用正确的动词搭配，并使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, singing can bring happiness to people who are feeling down. For example, when my child receives an unfair exam result, she listens to her favorite songs to relax and improve her mood.

× I really love seeing because I think seeing is a relax relaxing things for me to get out of my pleasure.

✓ I really love singing because I think singing is a relaxing thing for me to get pleasure.

动词love后面应该接动名词形式，seeing应改为singing。relaxing是形容词，修饰thing，things应为单数thing，因为前面有不定冠词a。句子表达应为“我喜欢唱歌，因为唱歌对我来说是一件放松的事情，能让我获得快乐”。

× I really love seeing because I think seeing is a relax relaxing things for me to get out of my pleasure.

✓ I really love singing because I think singing is a relaxing thing for me to get pleasure.

things应改为thing，因为前面有不定冠词a，a后面应接单数名词。

× I really love seeing because I think seeing is a relax relaxing things for me to get out of my pleasure.

✓ I really love singing because I think singing is a relaxing thing for me to get pleasure.

短语get out of my pleasure不合适，正确表达应为get pleasure，意为获得快乐。

× For example, when I have experience of much of pressure on study, I usually see my favorite songs to help me relax and improve my mood.

✓ For example, when I have experienced a lot of pressure in my studies, I usually listen to my favorite songs to help me relax and improve my mood.

have experience应为have experienced，表示过去经历。much of pressure不自然，应为a lot of pressure。on study应为in my studies。see my favorite songs应为listen to my favorite songs，动词搭配错误。

× Uh, actually I have not attended a professional umm sing class but umm I know how to sing umm from the actors or actress in in the TV shows or movies.

✓ Uh, actually I have not attended a professional singing class but I know how to sing from the actors or actresses in TV shows or movies.

sing class应为singing class，动名词作名词使用。actors or actress应为actors or actresses，复数形式。in in重复，应删去一个。

× Uh, actually I have not attended a professional umm sing class but umm I know how to sing umm from the actors or actress in in the TV shows or movies.

✓ Uh, actually I have not attended a professional singing class but I know how to sing from the actors or actresses in TV shows or movies.

actress应改为复数形式actresses，因为前面有or连接复数actors。

× Uh, actually I have not attended a professional umm sing class but umm I know how to sing umm from the actors or actress in in the TV shows or movies.

✓ Uh, actually I have not attended a professional singing class but I know how to sing from the actors or actresses in TV shows or movies.

in in重复，应删去一个。

× I want to sing for my mom because although my mom really loves music but she can sing song very well and so on.

✓ I want to sing for my mom because although my mom really loves music, she cannot sing songs very well.

song应为复数songs，表示多首歌曲。

× I want to sing for my mom because although my mom really loves music but she can sing song very well and so on.

✓ I want to sing for my mom because although my mom really loves music, she cannot sing songs very well.

because, although, but三者不能同时使用，应去掉but，且句子中应使用cannot表示否定。

× If I sing the favorite songs for her and she will very happy.

✓ If I sing the favorite songs for her, she will be very happy.

will后应接动词原形be，very是副词修饰形容词happy，缺少be动词。

× If I sing the favorite songs for her and she will very happy.

✓ If I sing the favorite songs for her, she will be very happy.

条件句中if从句和主句应用逗号分隔，且主句缺少be动词。

× And I think a thing for my mom is a appreciation way to show my love.

✓ And I think singing for my mom is a way to show my appreciation and love.

a thing for my mom表达不清，应改为singing for my mom。a appreciation应为an appreciation。句子结构不完整，需调整表达。

× On Yes on singing can bring a lot of happiness to people who have a bad mood.

✓ Yes, singing can bring a lot of happiness to people who are in a bad mood.

have a bad mood表达不自然，应为are in a bad mood。

× For example, when my children have an unfair exam result and she will see her favorite songs to help her relax and lift her mood.

✓ For example, when my child has an unfair exam result, she listens to her favorite songs to help her relax and lift her mood.

children是复数，后文用she不匹配，应改为child。have应改为has，主谓一致。see应改为listen to，动词搭配错误。