Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了喜欢唱歌的原因，但用词不够准确，"clean up the bad wound"不符合英语习惯，建议使用更自然的表达方式，如"relieve stress"或"heal emotional pain"。同时，回答稍显冗长，可以更简洁。

例: Yes, I really like singing because it makes me feel happier and helps me relax when I'm stressed.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误，如"haven't have"应为"haven't had"，句子结构不完整，表达不流畅。建议练习完整句子表达，并注意时态和冠词的使用。

例: No, I haven't had any professional singing lessons, but I enjoy singing by myself with my phone in my free time.

提案: 回答内容完整且有逻辑，表达了原因和感情，语言较自然。可以尝试使用更多连接词使句子更流畅，如"because", "so", "therefore"等。

例: I want to sing for my family, especially my parents, because they have always supported me. Singing is a meaningful way to show my gratitude to them.

提案: 回答中有拼写错误，如"seeing"应为"singing"，"attend to concerts"应为"attend concerts"，"the atmosphere in the live"表达不自然。建议注意拼写和固定搭配的使用，句子结构应更清晰。

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people. For example, many people enjoy attending concerts because the lively atmosphere is exciting and uplifting.

× Yes, I really like singing because I think singing can make me happier and help me calm down and clean up the bad wound.

✓ Yes, I really like singing because I think singing can make me happier and help me calm down and heal the bad wound.

这里的“clean up the bad wound”用法不当，通常我们说“heal a wound”表示伤口愈合。clean up更常用于清理污渍或垃圾。建议用“heal”替换“clean up”。

× Uh, no, I haven't have professional singing class but I love.

✓ Uh, no, I haven't had professional singing classes but I love singing.

“haven't have”是错误的助动词和动词形式搭配，正确用法是“haven't had”。另外，“singing class”应为复数“singing classes”，且句子不完整，补充“singing”使句子完整。

× Singing with a phone by myself in my free time.

✓ I like singing with a phone by myself in my free time.

该句缺少主语和谓语，属于句子结构错误。需要补充主语“I like”使句子完整。

× Yes, I think seeing can bring happiness to people.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people.

“seeing”是动名词，意思是“看见”，与上下文不符，应为“singing”表示“唱歌”。这是代词使用错误。

× For example, many people like to attend to concerts because the atmosphere in the live is exciting and can heal people.

✓ For example, many people like to attend concerts because the atmosphere at the live show is exciting and can heal people.

“attend to concerts”中“attend”后不加“to”，正确用法是“attend concerts”。“in the live”表达不准确，应为“at the live show”或“at live concerts”。