Part 1
試験官
Do you like singing? Why?
受験者
Yes, exactly because it is a good way for me to reduce my stress and get and helps me to get less stressed and and sometimes it can helps me to concentrate my mind and focus on my task when I was working.
試験官
Have you ever learnt how to sing?
受験者
Yes, like I said before, I attended chorus in high school. I gained a lot of experience in singing together or singing along it. It helps me to change the pattern of singing that I was in middle school.
試験官
Who do you want to sing for?
受験者
Actually not much because you know, I'm not the energetic people, so I like to stay alone and sing for myself because it is a very comfortable way to get less stressed and relaxed.
試験官
Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?
受験者
Yes, exactly because the singing is the best way to express your mood or doubt to others. It is very easy to have someone understand your feel your doubts.
Do you like singing? Why?
スコア: 60.0提案: 回答中存在重复和语法错误,表达不够流畅。建议简化句子结构,避免重复,并使用更自然的表达方式。
例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me reduce stress and improves my concentration when I work.
Have you ever learnt how to sing?
スコア: 65.0提案: 回答内容较为模糊,表达不够清晰。建议使用更具体的细节,并注意语法和用词准确。
例: Yes, I joined the school choir in high school, which helped me improve my singing skills and learn how to harmonize with others.
Who do you want to sing for?
スコア: 70.0提案: 回答表达了个人喜好,但句子结构不够自然,且有语法错误。建议简化句子,使用更自然的表达。
例: I usually sing alone because I find it relaxing and it helps me relieve stress.
Do you think singing can bring happiness to people?
スコア: 60.0提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题。建议使用更准确的词汇和句子结构,清楚表达观点。
例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because it allows people to express their emotions and connect with others.
× Yes, exactly because it is a good way for me to reduce my stress and get and helps me to get less stressed and and sometimes it can helps me to concentrate my mind and focus on my task when I was working.
✓ Yes, exactly because it is a good way for me to reduce my stress and helps me to get less stressed, and sometimes it can help me to concentrate my mind and focus on my task when I am working.
句中“can helps”中“helps”应为动词原形“help”,因为情态动词后接动词原形。并且“when I was working”应改为“when I am working”,保持时态一致。
× I gained a lot of experience in singing together or singing along it.
✓ I gained a lot of experience in singing together or singing along with it.
短语“singing along it”缺少介词“with”,正确表达应为“singing along with it”。
× Actually not much because you know, I'm not the energetic people, so I like to stay alone and sing for myself because it is a very comfortable way to get less stressed and relaxed.
✓ Actually not much because you know, I'm not an energetic person, so I like to stay alone and sing for myself because it is a very comfortable way to get less stressed and relaxed.
“the energetic people”应为单数形式“an energetic person”,因为主语是“I”,需要与之对应的单数形式。
× Yes, exactly because the singing is the best way to express your mood or doubt to others.
✓ Yes, exactly because singing is the best way to express your mood or doubt to others.
“the singing”中“the”不必要,泛指唱歌时不需要定冠词,故应去掉“the”。
× It is very easy to have someone understand your feel your doubts.
✓ It is very easy to have someone understand your feelings and your doubts.
“your feel your doubts”中“feel”用法错误,应为名词“feelings”,且“feel your doubts”表达不清,改为“your feelings and your doubts”更准确。