Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use the present tense consistently and avoid repetition. Also, make your answer more natural by using linking words and clearer sentence structure. For example, say 'I like singing because it helps me forget daily stress and improves my mood. However, I don't sing every day.'

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me forget daily stress and improves my mood. However, I don't sing every day, only when I feel like it.

提案: Use correct verb forms and prepositions. Instead of 'learned me', say 'taught me'. Also, add linking words to make your answer clearer and more natural.

例: Yes, I learned how to sing when I was a student at school. My teacher taught me how to improve my singing skills.

提案: Improve sentence clarity and grammar. Use 'sing' with 'to' or 'for' correctly. Also, avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. For example, say 'I prefer to sing alone because my voice is not clear and I don't think it sounds nice.'

例: Actually, I prefer to sing alone because my voice is not clear and I don't think it sounds nice.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to explain your idea clearly. For example, say 'Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because when people start singing, they express their feelings and feel joyful.'

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because when people start singing, they express their feelings and feel joyful.

× Yes, I loved singing because it make me forget a daily stress and improve my mood.

✓ Yes, I love singing because it makes me forget daily stress and improves my mood.

The verb 'make' should be in the third person singular form 'makes' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, 'improve' should be 'improves' for the same reason. 'Loved' is past tense but the context suggests present tense 'love'. 'A daily stress' is incorrect; 'daily stress' is uncountable and does not need 'a'.

× It's really good for me but I'm I'm not singing every day or every time.

✓ It's really good for me but I don't sing every day or all the time.

The phrase 'I'm I'm not singing' is incorrect; it should be 'I don't sing' to express habitual action. 'Every time' is better expressed as 'all the time' in this context.

× Yes, I learned how to sing when I was a student school.

✓ Yes, I learned how to sing when I was a student at school.

The phrase 'student school' is missing the preposition 'at'. 'Learned' is correct past tense here.

× My teacher learned me how to improve my singing skills.

✓ My teacher taught me how to improve my singing skills.

The verb 'learned' is incorrectly used; the correct verb is 'taught' when someone instructs another person.

× Actually I prefer sing alone because my my voice is not clearly and is not nice.

✓ Actually, I prefer singing alone because my voice is not clear and is not nice.

After 'prefer', the gerund form 'singing' is required. 'Clearly' is an adverb but the adjective 'clear' is needed to describe 'voice'.

× Actually that is.

✓ Actually, that is the case.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear; adding 'the case' completes the thought.

× Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to the people because when when they start to sing, when they start singing, they they, the feeling come out with the singing.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people because when they start to sing, feelings come out with the singing.

Repeated words 'when when' and 'they they' are errors. 'The people' is better as 'people' in general. 'The feeling come' should be 'feelings come' to agree in number.