Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but lacks clarity and coherence. Try to organize your ideas logically and avoid incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, be more specific about why singing is therapeutic for you.

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. For example, when I am alone, singing allows me to clear my mind and feel calm, which is like a form of therapy for me.

提案: Your answer is clear but could be improved by using more precise vocabulary and linking words. Instead of repeating 'I didn't like' and 'I didn't enjoy', try to explain why you didn't like the choir lessons. This will make your answer more detailed and interesting.

例: No, I haven't learned how to sing professionally. However, when I was at music school, we had choir lessons where we sang in groups. I didn't enjoy these lessons because I felt uncomfortable singing in front of others.

提案: Your answer is unclear and difficult to understand. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use correct grammar. Focus on directly answering the question and provide specific reasons or examples. Use linking words to organize your thoughts.

例: I want to sing for my close friends and family because singing allows me to express my feelings and share my favorite songs with them. It helps me show my appreciation and emotions.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but needs better structure and clearer language. Use linking words to connect your points and correct grammar mistakes. Be more specific about how singing brings happiness during family gatherings.

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness. For instance, when my family and relatives gather, we often sing together, sometimes with musical instruments. This creates joyful and memorable moments for everyone.

× I usually sing when I'm with my friends or alone when I spend time hanging out, where with my family.

✓ I usually sing when I'm with my friends or alone when I spend time hanging out with my family.

The preposition 'where' is incorrectly used here. The correct preposition to indicate spending time with family is 'with'. Replace 'where with my family' with 'with my family' to correct the sentence.

× It is the type of activity that works for me. The therapy.

✓ It is the type of activity that works for me; it's like therapy.

The sentence 'The therapy.' is a fragment and does not form a complete sentence. Combining it with the previous sentence using a semicolon or rephrasing improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× when I was studying at music school, we used to have a choir lessons where we just sing in the group of people, students.

✓ when I was studying at music school, we used to have choir lessons where we just sang in a group of students.

'Choir lessons' is plural, so 'a' should be removed. Also, 'sing' should be in past tense 'sang' to match 'used to have'. 'Group of people, students' is awkward; 'group of students' is clearer.

× we used to have a choir lessons

✓ we used to have choir lessons

The phrase 'a choir lessons' is incorrect because 'lessons' is plural and cannot be preceded by the singular article 'a'. Removing 'a' corrects the phrase.

× where we just sing in the group of people, students.

✓ where we just sang in a group of students.

Since the action happened in the past, the verb should be in past tense 'sang' instead of present tense 'sing'.

× Sometimes I want to think for the closest people in my environment 'cause I can think them about the feeling that I have or think that your favorite, favorite song, music and maybe to show that I I don't like.

✓ Sometimes I want to sing for the closest people in my environment because I can express to them the feelings I have or share my favorite songs and maybe show what I like.

The original sentence has multiple errors including incorrect verb usage ('think' instead of 'sing' or 'express'), incorrect prepositions, and unclear phrasing. Replacing 'think' with 'sing' and restructuring the sentence clarifies the meaning and corrects grammar.

× I can think them about the feeling that I have

✓ I can express to them the feelings that I have

The verb 'think' is incorrectly used with 'them about'. The correct verb is 'express' and the preposition 'to' is used with 'them' to indicate the direction of expression.

× think that your favorite, favorite song, music and maybe to show that I I don't like.

✓ share my favorite songs and maybe show what I like.

The pronouns and phrasing are confusing and incorrect. 'Your' should be 'my' to reflect the speaker's favorites, and the sentence should be rephrased for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× we usually tend to think with musical instruments or just without them

✓ we usually tend to sing with musical instruments or just without them

The verb 'think' is incorrectly used here; the intended verb is 'sing'. Using 'sing' correctly fits the context of the conversation about singing.

× it really give us enjoy and interesting times.

✓ it really gives us enjoyable and interesting times.

The verb 'give' should be 'gives' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, 'enjoy' should be the adjective 'enjoyable' to describe 'times'.