Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了喜欢唱歌的原因，但句子较长且有些重复，建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，同时注意语法准确性。可以用更自然的表达方式来说明唱歌如何帮助你减压和表达情感。

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relieve stress from studying and express both my positive and negative emotions clearly.

提案: 回答中信息较丰富，但句子结构不够清晰，存在语法错误和表达不连贯的问题。建议分句表达，使用连接词使内容更连贯，同时注意时态和语法的准确性。

例: Yes, I have been learning to sing since middle school. For example, my teacher taught me how to control my breathing, which helps me maintain a calm and balanced voice. This training has improved my vocal skills and made singing more enjoyable.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和用词不当，如“respective”应为“respect”。建议注意词汇的准确使用，句子结构应更简洁，表达感谢的原因时可以更具体。

例: I want to sing for my best friend because she has helped me a lot in my life and studies. Singing for her is my way to show respect and appreciation.

提案: 回答中出现了拼写错误（"seeing"应为"singing"），且表达不够自然。建议注意拼写和发音的准确性，句子应更流畅，内容更具体。

例: Of course, I believe singing can bring happiness because it allows me to express positive emotions directly to my family and close friends.

× Yes, I like singing because I think it is a useful way for me to reduce the pressure when I study in school and it can express my emotions not only the positive but also the negative emotions directly.

✓ Yes, I like singing because I think it is a useful way for me to reduce the pressure when I study in school and it can express my emotions, not only the positive but also the negative emotions directly.

原句中缺少逗号，导致句子结构不清晰。应在“emotions”和“not only”之间加逗号，使句子更通顺。

× For example, my teacher taught me an interesting way to control my breathing and maintain a calm and balanced voice while seeing this training help me improve my vocal skills and enjoy singing more.

✓ For example, my teacher taught me an interesting way to control my breathing and maintain a calm and balanced voice, and I see this training helps me improve my vocal skills and enjoy singing more.

原句中“while seeing”用法不当，应改为“and I see”或类似结构，表示两个动作并列发生。动词形式需调整以符合语法。

× Well, I want to sing for my best friend. You know that she helped me a lot in many ways, not only my life but also helped me to improve my subject.

✓ Well, I want to sing for my best friend. You know that she has helped me a lot in many ways, not only in my life but also in helping me improve my subjects.

原句中“helped”时态不当，应使用现在完成时“has helped”表示从过去到现在的持续影响；“not only my life but also helped me to improve my subject”结构不完整，需补充介词和调整表达。

× So I want to show my respective and appreciation to her.

✓ So I want to show my respect and appreciation to her.

“respective”是形容词，意思是“各自的”，用错词，应使用名词“respect”表示“尊重”。

× Of course, yes, I think seeing is a very direct way for me to show my positive emotions to others, especially to my family members, to my best friends.

✓ Of course, yes, I think singing is a very direct way for me to show my positive emotions to others, especially to my family members and my best friends.

原句中“seeing”应为“singing”，因为上下文讨论的是唱歌；另外，列举时“to my family members, to my best friends”应改为“to my family members and my best friends”更自然。