Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了喜欢唱歌的原因，但语言不够自然，句子结构混乱，且有语法错误。建议简化句子，使用更自然的表达方式，并注意时态和语法的正确性。

例: Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. Singing helps me forget my worries and enjoy the moment.

提案: 回答中表达了学习唱歌的经历，但句子不够连贯，时态使用不当，且细节描述不够具体。建议使用连词使句子更流畅，并注意时态一致。

例: When I was a child, I loved English songs. I used to write down the lyrics and practice the pronunciation carefully. Although it was difficult, I enjoyed the process very much.

提案: 你的回答表达清楚，结构较好，但可以使用更多连接词使表达更流畅，同时丰富细节使内容更具体。

例: I prefer to sing for my parents because I am usually shy to express my love directly. Singing for them is a special way to show my feelings and make them happy.

提案: 回答中观点明确，但表达不够自然，句子结构混乱。建议简化句子，使用连接词，并具体说明唱歌如何帮助人们释放压力。

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness because it helps people relax and release stress. It also allows them to express their emotions, which can be very comforting.

× Sure I like singing best for the reason as that when I was singing I feel happy and relaxed and singing it away to makes me feel more comfortable of dead life is a very very relaxing method and happy man.

✓ Sure, I like singing best because when I sing, I feel happy and relaxed. Singing helps me feel more comfortable. Singing is a very relaxing method and makes me a happy person.

原句中动词形式使用不当，如“when I was singing I feel”时态不一致，应统一为一般现在时“when I sing, I feel”。“singing it away to makes me”结构混乱，应改为“Singing helps me”。此外，句子结构混乱，需拆分成多个句子表达清晰。

× When I was a child I was absorbed with English songs. So I write down the war songs in the book and check the word pronunciation 1 by 1 and that that is a really difficult but funny moment.

✓ When I was a child, I was absorbed in English songs. So I wrote down the words of the songs in a book and checked the pronunciation one by one. That was a really difficult but fun moment.

句中时态不一致，描述过去的事情应使用过去时，如“write”应改为“wrote”，“check”应改为“checked”。“that that is”重复且时态错误，应改为“That was”。此外，“war songs”应为“words of the songs”，更符合语境。

× Actually I prefer to sing for my parents because in normal days I was a little shy to speak out the love to them. If I have a chance, I will sing to them to show my love.

✓ Actually, I prefer to sing for my parents because normally I am a little shy to express my love to them. If I have a chance, I will sing to them to show my love.

“in normal days I was”时态不当，描述习惯应使用一般现在时“normally I am”。“speak out the love”表达不自然，应改为“express my love”。

× Suddenly singing is a way to be happy and relax because it can help people release their stress and singing is a way to show them by saying something they could express their sadness.

✓ Singing is a way to be happy and relaxed because it can help people release their stress. Singing is also a way for them to express their sadness by saying something.

“be happy and relax”中“relax”应为形容词“relaxed”。句子结构混乱，需拆分为两句以表达清楚。“show them by saying something they could express their sadness”表达不清，应改为“a way for them to express their sadness by saying something”。