Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议注意动词形式和句子结构，避免重复和冗余，使表达更自然流畅。

例: Yes, I like singing because it is a great way to express my feelings, whether I am happy or sad. Also, singing helps me relax after a busy day.

提案: 回答中动词时态错误较多，表达不够准确，建议加强时态和语法的正确使用，同时使句子更简洁自然。

例: No, I haven't learned how to sing yet, but I plan to. I enjoy music, although I'm not very good at singing, so I want to take online singing lessons someday.

提案: 回答表达混乱，语法和词汇使用错误较多，建议先明确回答问题，再用简洁的句子说明原因，避免使用错误词汇。

例: I want to sing for myself because singing helps me express my feelings, like happiness and sadness, more clearly.

提案: 回答中存在词汇错误（seeing应为singing），时态不一致，建议注意词汇准确性和时态一致性，同时丰富细节使表达更具体。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people. When I feel sad, I often listen to cheerful songs because they help me feel better and forget my worries.

× I like singing because I think it is one of the best way to express my feeling.

✓ I like singing because I think it is one of the best ways to express my feelings.

这里“way”应使用复数形式“ways”，因为前面有“one of the”，后面名词应为复数形式。同时，“feeling”应为复数“feelings”，表示多种感情。

× What other sadness or happiness And I think singing is seeing is my way to relax myself.

✓ Whether sadness or happiness, I think singing is my way to relax myself.

原句结构混乱，缺少连贯的连接词，且“seeing is my way”表达错误。应使用“Whether...or...”结构表达“无论是悲伤还是快乐”，并去掉多余词语。

× No, I haven't learn how to sing, but it is my plan.

✓ No, I haven't learned how to sing, but it is my plan.

“haven't”后应接过去分词“learned”，表示完成时态，原句中使用了动词原形“learn”，时态错误。

× So I plan to learn how to sing music in the Internet one day.

✓ So I plan to learn how to sing music on the Internet one day.

表示在互联网上，正确介词应为“on”，而非“in”。

× Oh I want to think for myself as well know seeing is the one way to express 1's feelings such as sadness and happiness.

✓ Oh, I want to think for myself as well. I know singing is one way to express one's feelings such as sadness and happiness.

原句中“think for myself as well know”语法错误，应拆分为两句；“seeing”应为“singing”；“1's”应为“one's”，表示“某人的”。

× So I want to say for myself to help me better express this.

✓ So I want to sing for myself to help me better express this.

“say for myself”表达不当，应为“sing for myself”，符合上下文语境。

× Yes, I think seeing can bring happiness to people.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people.

“seeing”应为“singing”，原词拼写错误。

× When I felt sadness, I always listen some happy music.

✓ When I feel sadness, I always listen to some happy music.

“felt”应改为一般现在时“feel”，因为后文“always listen”表示习惯性动作；“listen”后应加介词“to”。

× I always listen some happy music.

✓ I always listen to some happy music.

动词“listen”后应接介词“to”，表示“听某物”。