Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时有重复（"I I"），影响流畅性。建议避免重复，保持语言自然简洁。同时可以增加连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, singing is one of my favorite activities after a busy day because it helps me relax and forget about stress. Moreover, I sometimes enjoy singing pop songs as they are uplifting and energetic.

提案: 回答内容较好，但“my manager is musicology”表达不准确，建议使用更准确的词汇，如“musicologist”。同时可以用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: Oh yes, I have learned a little bit of singing because my manager is a musicologist, and we had to take a course related to singing. Although I am not a professional singer, this experience helped me understand the basics of vocal techniques.

提案: 回答中“leaves their spirits”表达不准确，建议使用更合适的短语，如“lifts their spirits”。此外，结尾句不完整，建议补充完整表达。

例: I really want to sing for my family and friends because I believe music is a good way to help people feel relaxed and joyful. For example, when I sing for them during gatherings, it often lifts their spirits and creates a warm, happy atmosphere. This makes me feel closer to them.

提案: 回答中有语法错误（"yes thing"），表达不清晰。建议改为"Definitely, singing can bring..."。另外，"connect with us"表达不准确，建议改为"connect with others"。

例: Definitely, singing can bring people a lot of happiness because it allows them to express their emotions and relieve stress. For example, when I sing my favorite songs, I feel more energetic and relaxed, and it is also a good way to connect with others.

× I I like to sing because it helps me relax and forget about stress.

✓ I like to sing because it helps me relax and forget about stress.

句子中出现了重复的主语“I I”，这是一个语法错误，应删除多余的“I”。

× my manager is musicology and we had to take a course related to singing.

✓ my manager is a musicologist and we had to take a course related to singing.

“musicology”是“音乐学”学科名词，正确的职业称呼应为“musicologist”（音乐学家）。此处应使用名词形式表示职业。

× I really want to sing for my family and friends because I believe music is a good way to help people feel relaxed and joyful.

✓ I really want to sing to my family and friends because I believe music is a good way to help people feel relaxed and joyful.

动词“sing”后面搭配介词应为“to”，表示向某人唱歌，而非“for”。

× when I sing for them during gatherings, it often leaves their spirits and creates a warm, happy atmosphere.

✓ when I sing for them during gatherings, it often lifts their spirits and creates a warm, happy atmosphere.

短语“leaves their spirits”不符合习惯表达，应使用“lifts their spirits”表示“振奋他们的精神”。

× Definitely yes thing can bring people a lot of happiness because it allows them to express their emotions and relieve stress.

✓ Definitely yes, singing can bring people a lot of happiness because it allows them to express their emotions and relieve stress.

句中“yes thing”结构不正确，应明确主语“singing”，并在“yes”后加逗号以分隔语气词。

× when I sing my favorite songs, I feel more energetic and relaxed and it is also a good way to connect with us.

✓ when I sing my favorite songs, I feel more energetic and relaxed and it is also a good way to connect with others.

“connect with us”表达不当，主语是“I”，应使用“connect with others”表示与他人建立联系。