Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words like 'uh', and provide specific reasons. Also, keep your answer concise and natural.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. I often sing in the bathroom since it has good acoustics, which makes it more enjoyable.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Make sure to finish your sentences and explain your experience clearly. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details about your learning experience.

例: Yes, I took singing lessons when I was in fifth grade. Although it was challenging at first, I enjoyed learning new techniques and improving my voice.

提案: Your answer is somewhat humorous but could be clearer and more structured. Start with a direct response, then add supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and awkward phrasing.

例: I want to sing for my husband because he enjoys my singing, even though sometimes my voice might not be perfect. It makes us both happy and brings us closer.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. Use simpler, clearer sentences and provide specific reasons or examples. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it allows people to express their feelings and connect with others emotionally. For example, singing can lift someone's mood and create a joyful atmosphere.

× Transparent I always admire to singing because it's my first love.

✓ Frankly, I have always admired singing because it's my first love.

The phrase 'admire to singing' is incorrect. The verb 'admire' is followed directly by a gerund without 'to'. Also, 'Transparent' is likely a mishearing or misuse; 'Frankly' fits better here.

× Actually, I'm a bathroom singer so I, uh, always love to sing in bathroom.

✓ Actually, I'm a bathroom singer, so I always love to sing in the bathroom.

The phrase 'in bathroom' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'bathroom'. Also, 'love to sing' is acceptable but 'love singing' is more natural; however, the main issue is the missing article.

× Well, when I was in class 5 at my primary school, I learned it was very arduous for me and it's always like purged for me and.

✓ Well, when I was in class 5 at my primary school, I learned it was very arduous for me and it was always like a purge for me.

The phrase 'it's always like purged for me' is incorrect. 'Purged' is a past participle and does not fit here. The intended meaning seems to be 'like a purge', a noun. Also, 'it's' should be 'it was' to maintain past tense consistency.

× Obviously I want to sing for my handsome husband and when I try to sing it's very it's hideous for him and hilarious also and sometime it's tedious for him to listen to my song.

✓ Obviously, I want to sing for my handsome husband, and when I try to sing, it's very hideous for him and hilarious also, and sometimes it's tedious for him to listen to my singing.

The phrase 'it's hideous for him' is awkward; 'it's very hideous to him' or 'he finds it hideous' would be better, but keeping the original structure, adding commas improves clarity. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'. Also, 'my song' is better as 'my singing' to refer to the act.

× Obviously in singing people admire their their feelings and they express their emotion with other and it's very gorgeous things about singing and it's make man's heartfelt.

✓ Obviously, in singing, people admire their feelings and express their emotions with others, and it's a very beautiful thing about singing that touches a man's heart.

The phrase 'their their' is a repetition error. 'Emotion' should be plural 'emotions'. 'With other' should be 'with others'. 'It's very gorgeous things' is incorrect; 'it's a very beautiful thing' is correct. 'It's make man's heartfelt' is ungrammatical; 'that touches a man's heart' conveys the intended meaning.