Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is expressive and uses rich vocabulary, but it is a bit long and somewhat complex, which may affect naturalness and clarity. Try to keep your answers concise and directly related to the question, avoiding overly elaborate phrases. Also, ensure your sentences are clear and easy to follow.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it helps me relax and express my emotions. Although I don't perform in front of others, I love singing traditional songs like Slavic folk music. Singing feels like a way to free my mind and find peace.

提案: Your answer is clear and provides specific details, which is good. However, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and avoid minor errors (e.g., 'the Barnier' should be 'the Barynya'). Also, keep sentences concise and avoid overly complex structures to maintain naturalness.

例: No, I have never learned to sing, but I wish I had. I hope to sing my favorite folk songs someday, maybe while wearing traditional clothes and performing the Barynya, a lively Russian folk dance, to make the performance more authentic.

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors that affect understanding. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using simple and correct sentences. Also, avoid awkward phrases like 'putting my heart out through sight to see of unfamiliar faces.'

例: I haven't decided who I want to sing for yet. However, I imagine standing alone on a big stage and sharing my feelings with an audience of strangers. That idea really excites me.

提案: Your answer shows good understanding but contains some errors and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'Singing release and orphans the body's natural feel good hormones'). Try to use simpler, clearer sentences and correct vocabulary. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: I think singing can make many people happy because it releases natural feel-good hormones in the body. However, not everyone enjoys singing, so it depends on the person. Overall, singing often helps improve mood and bring joy.

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

The verb 'learn' in American English uses the past participle form 'learned' rather than 'learnt'. Using 'learned' is more standard in American English, which is the context here.

× One of my dearest aspirations is to sing my favorite folklore songs, ideally while dressed in a traditional costume and performing the Barnier, A spirited Russian folk dance, to give the music an authentic, vibrant flair.

✓ One of my dearest aspirations is to sing my favorite folklore songs, ideally while dressed in a traditional costume and performing the Barynya, a spirited Russian folk dance, to give the music an authentic, vibrant flair.

The sentence contains a capitalization error and a misspelling of 'Barynya' (a Russian folk dance). Also, the comma before 'A spirited Russian folk dance' should be lowercase 'a' to correctly appositive the noun phrase. Correcting these improves clarity and correctness.

× To be honest, I haven't settled on a specific audience yet, but truly captivates me is the thought of standing alone on a grand stage, putting my heart out through sight to see of unfamiliar faces.

✓ To be honest, I haven't settled on a specific audience yet, but what truly captivates me is the thought of standing alone on a grand stage, putting my heart out through sight to see unfamiliar faces.

The original sentence is missing the subject 'what' before 'truly captivates me', which causes a sentence structure error. Adding 'what' corrects the sentence structure and clarifies the meaning. Also, 'to see of unfamiliar faces' is incorrect; it should be 'to see unfamiliar faces'.

× Singing release and orphans the body's natural feel good hormones, which can alleviate mood and foster happiness.

✓ Singing releases and awakens the body's natural feel-good hormones, which can alleviate mood and foster happiness.

The original sentence uses 'release and orphans' incorrectly. The intended verbs are likely 'releases' and 'awakens' or similar. Also, 'feel good' should be hyphenated as 'feel-good' when used as a compound adjective. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical correctness.