Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答内容丰富且表达了个人感受，但句子较长且有些重复，建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，使表达更自然流畅。

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relieve stress and express my emotions. Also, singing along with the rhythm makes me feel happy and relaxed.

提案: 回答中信息较多，但句子结构复杂且有些重复，建议使用更简洁的句子，并用连接词使表达更连贯。

例: Yes, I have learned singing in primary school music lessons where teachers taught us basic techniques. However, I don't think I sing very well yet.

提案: 回答中表达了观点，但句子不够连贯，且有语法错误。建议注意句子连接和语法准确性，避免口语化表达。

例: I usually don't sing for others because I lack confidence. However, I always sing 'Happy Birthday' for my friends on their birthdays.

提案: 回答内容较好，但句子结构稍显笨拙，建议使用更自然的连接词和表达方式，使句子更流畅。

例: Yes, I believe singing joyful and hopeful songs can express the singer's feelings and spread happiness to listeners. This is often seen in movies where a song plays during the finale.

× I like to sing because singing is a way for me to reduce my stress and express my emotions, and in addition, when I follow the rhythm and sing aloud, I can feel a sense of happiness and relax.

✓ I like to sing because singing is a way for me to reduce my stress and express my emotions, and in addition, when I follow the rhythm and sing aloud, I can feel a sense of happiness and relaxation.

句中“relax”用作名词时应为“relaxation”，表示“放松”的状态，而“relax”是动词，需改为名词形式以符合句意。

× Have you ever learnt how to sing?

✓ Have you ever learned how to sing?

“learnt”和“learned”都是“learn”的过去分词，前者为英式英语，后者为美式英语。根据语境和习惯，建议统一使用“learned”以符合更广泛的用法。

× But I wouldn't say that I can sing well after learning all these methods.

✓ But I wouldn't say that I can sing well even after learning all these methods.

原句中“after learning all these methods”表达不够准确，建议加“even”强调即使学了这些方法也不能唱好，更符合语境。

× I'm a bad singer and I don't have the confidence to sing for others or even publics, but there's exceptions.

✓ I'm a bad singer and I don't have the confidence to sing for others or even the public, but there are exceptions.

“publics”用法错误，应使用“the public”表示“公众”；“there's exceptions”主谓不一致，应改为“there are exceptions”。

× Happy birthday for them.

✓ Happy birthday to them.

表达祝福时应使用介词“to”，即“Happy birthday to them.”，而非“for”。

× Yes, I believe singing songs that have themes around joy and hope definitely can express the singer's feeling and spread it to the listeners.

✓ Yes, I believe singing songs that have themes around joy and hope can definitely express the singer's feelings and spread them to the listeners.

“feeling”应为复数“feelings”，因为情感通常是复数；“spread it”中的“it”应与前文复数“feelings”一致，改为“them”。

× And that also apply in many of the movies where they have a song in the finale.

✓ And that also applies in many movies where they have a song in the finale.

“apply”应与主语“that”保持单数形式“applies”；“in many of the movies”中“of the”可省略，简化为“in many movies”。