Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了情感，但句子结构不够自然，且表达略显复杂。建议使用更简洁自然的句子，直接表达喜欢唱歌的原因，并避免使用“emotion cues”这类不常用表达。

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me express my emotions and makes me feel happy and relaxed.

提案: 回答中有语法错误，如“never systematically learn”应为“have never systematically learned”。另外，提到“you”作为老师不够清晰，建议避免直接称呼考官。

例: No, I have never taken formal singing lessons. I usually learn songs by myself online and practice at home.

提案: 回答不够直接，表达含糊且句子较长。建议直接回答想为谁唱歌，并用简单明了的语言解释原因。

例: I want to sing for myself because music helps me understand and express my own feelings.

提案: 回答中有语法错误，如“if someone suffer”应为“if someone suffers”。表达稍显复杂，建议简化句子并直接回答问题。

例: I think singing can bring happiness to many people because it helps them express their feelings, but it might not help everyone, especially those going through very hard times.

× Actually, I never systematically learn how to sing before.

✓ Actually, I have never systematically learned how to sing before.

这里使用了现在完成时态，表示从过去到现在的经历，动词learn需要用过去分词learned。原句中使用一般现在时learn不符合语法规则。

× My only teacher is myself, you.

✓ My only teacher is myself.

句子中“you”多余且语义不清，应删除。

× Singing can be seen as one of my favorite activities in my daily life because it can give me happy, sad, and other complex emotion cues.

✓ Singing can be seen as one of my favorite activities in my daily life because it can give me happy, sad, and other complex emotional cues.

emotion是名词，作为形容词修饰cues时应使用形容词形式emotional。

× I used to learn songs online and practice them just in the basement of my apartment.

✓ I used to learn songs online and practice them just in the basement of my apartment.

此句无语法错误，保持原句。

× My music is prepared for the understanding people, but I am the one who can understand more about my true experiences.

✓ My music is prepared for understanding people, but I am the one who can understand more about my true experiences.

“for the understanding people”中“the”不必要，且“understanding people”作为短语更自然。

× In my opinion, music can be seen as a tool to express the happiness or sadness for people, but music cannot offer happiness for everyone, for example, if someone suffer from a disaster.

✓ In my opinion, music can be seen as a tool to express happiness or sadness for people, but music cannot offer happiness to everyone, for example, if someone suffers from a disaster.

“suffer”应使用第三人称单数形式“suffers”，因为主语是someone；“offer happiness for everyone”应改为“offer happiness to everyone”，介词使用错误。