Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答表达了喜欢唱歌的原因，但语言不够自然，句子结构混乱，存在重复和语法错误。建议简化句子，避免重复，使用更准确的表达方式，并且注意语法和时态的正确使用。

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me feel more confident. I am usually shy around others, but when I sing, I feel relaxed and can express my feelings more easily.

提案: 回答内容与问题不符，表达混乱且缺乏逻辑。建议直接回答是否学过唱歌，并简要说明学习经历或原因，避免无关内容。

例: Yes, I have taken some singing lessons before. However, because of my busy schedule with studies and other activities, I haven't practiced much recently.

提案: 回答表达不清晰，语法错误较多，句子结构混乱。建议明确指出想为谁唱歌，并简洁说明原因，使用正确的语法和连词使表达更连贯。

例: I want to sing for a special woman who has taught me many things, like being confident and making friends. Even if she doesn't like me singing, I want to show my appreciation to her.

提案: 回答内容混乱，表达不清楚，语法错误严重。建议直接回答问题，说明唱歌如何带来快乐，并举例说明，使用简单明了的句子。

例: Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to people. When I listen to songs, I remember happy moments with my family and friends, and it encourages me to be brave and do what I love.

× I like singing because I sing sing a little bit more confident.

✓ I like singing because it makes me a little bit more confident.

这里'sing sing'重复且用法错误，应使用动名词形式表达喜欢唱歌的原因。动名词作宾语时，表达动作的持续或习惯。

× I'm too shy to express myself between other people, but when I say I feel relaxed and everything is easy, I can easily to express myself feelings with others.

✓ I'm too shy to express myself among other people, but when I sing I feel relaxed and everything is easy, I can easily express my feelings with others.

'between'用于两者之间，'among'用于三者或以上。'when I say'应为'when I sing'，且'express myself feelings'结构错误，应为'express my feelings'。

× Have you ever learnt how to sing? Oh, it's Saturday night. I have so many time to learn that exactly as a student.

✓ Have you ever learnt how to sing? Oh, it's Saturday night. I have so much time to learn that exactly as a student.

'so many time'错误，time是不可数名词，应使用'so much time'。

× My mother, my father and my students all told me I shouldn't read more books, do more teams, and I don't have time to do too much things I love.

✓ My mother, my father and my teachers all told me I shouldn't read more books, do more teams, and I don't have time to do too many things I love.

'students'应为'teachers'，'too much things'错误，'things'为可数名词，应使用'too many things'。

× I want to sing for a much female uh, even though she don't like me to sing, but not only in life but also in a study, she taught me a lot and she taught me how to be confident and how to love myself and how to make friends with others a lot of things.

✓ I want to sing for a special female, even though she doesn't like me to sing, but not only in life but also in study, she has taught me a lot, including how to be confident, how to love myself, and how to make friends with others.

'much female'错误，female不可数，应使用'special female'或具体描述。'she don't'应为'she doesn't'。'in a study'应为'in study'。句子结构混乱，需调整。

× So I love her. I want to.

✓ So I love her. I want to sing for her.

句子不完整，'I want to'后应补充动词，表达完整意思。

× Aye aye, jazz song Lakshmi Jayalalithaa is some unhappiness to me.

✓ Yes, jazz songs like those by Lakshmi Jayalalithaa bring me some happiness.

原句表达混乱，'is some unhappiness to me'不合逻辑，应表达带来快乐。

× I think it do that to other people or won't listen to song.

✓ I think it does that to other people who listen to songs.

主语是单数，动词应用第三人称单数形式'does'。'won't listen to song'表达错误，应为'who listen to songs'。

× We will memory so many happiness things with my father, my mother or friends and encourage me to be brave and to do so many things I want to do is bad thing.

✓ We will remember so many happy moments with my father, my mother, or friends, and they encourage me to be brave and to do many things I want to do. It's not a bad thing.

'memory'应为动词'remember'。'happiness things'错误，应为'happy moments'。句子结构混乱，需拆分并调整。