Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够自然，表达混乱，句子结构不完整，建议简化句子，直接表达喜欢唱歌的原因，并注意语法和用词准确。

例: Yes, I like singing because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. When I was young, I played the piano and enjoyed listening to singers perform, which inspired me to love singing.

提案: 回答较为清晰，但表达略显口语化且有语法错误，建议使用更正式的表达，避免重复，句子更连贯。

例: I have not formally learned how to sing because I think my voice is not very good. Instead, I have focused on learning musical instruments to pursue my musical dreams in another way.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，建议直接回答想为谁唱歌，并用连贯的句子表达理由。

例: I think singing is a relaxing and entertaining activity. If I had a chance to sing on a big stage, I would like to perform for a large audience so that many people can hear my voice.

提案: 回答基本清楚，但表达不够流畅，建议使用更自然的句子结构，避免重复，增强表达的连贯性。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness. When I feel down, I like to listen to my favorite music because it helps me feel much better.

× I'm a huge freak of saying when I was young I played piano and I saw some singers, they played, they send a song when they play the piano and I love that feelings.

✓ I'm a huge fan of singing. When I was young, I played piano and I saw some singers; they played and sang a song when they played the piano, and I loved that feeling.

这里'saying'用错了，应该用动名词'singing'表示喜欢唱歌。'freak of saying'表达不正确，应该用'fan of singing'。另外，'send a song'应为'sang a song'，因为是过去时。'feelings'应为单数形式'feeling'，表示那种感觉。

× I'm a huge freak of saying when I was young I played piano and I saw some singers, they played, they send a song when they play the piano and I love that feelings.

✓ I'm a huge fan of singing. When I was young, I played piano and I saw some singers; they played and sang a song when they played the piano, and I loved that feeling.

句中'send'应为过去式'sang'，因为描述的是过去发生的动作。

× I'm a huge freak of saying when I was young I played piano and I saw some singers, they played, they send a song when they play the piano and I love that feelings.

✓ I'm a huge fan of singing. When I was young, I played piano and I saw some singers; they played and sang a song when they played the piano, and I loved that feeling.

'that feelings'中'feelings'是复数，但前面用的是'that'，应搭配单数名词，改为'that feeling'。

× I would love to, but my voice is not that good. So I try to learn some musical instruments and so I can achieve a musical dream in the other way, yeah.

✓ I would love to, but my voice is not that good. So I try to learn some musical instruments so that I can achieve my musical dream in another way, yeah.

'and so I can'连接不当，应改为'so that I can'表示目的。'in the other way'应为'in another way'，表示另一种方式。

× In my opinion, seeing is a relaxing and entertaining activities, so if I had a chance to sing in a big stage, I want to let my voice to get everybody knows.

✓ In my opinion, singing is a relaxing and entertaining activity, so if I had a chance to sing on a big stage, I would want to let my voice be known by everybody.

'seeing'应为'singing'。'activities'是复数，但前面用的是单数形容词'relaxing and entertaining'，应改为单数'activity'。'in a big stage'应为'on a big stage'。'I want to let my voice to get everybody knows'结构错误，应改为'I would want to let my voice be known by everybody'。

× In my opinion, seeing is a relaxing and entertaining activities, so if I had a chance to sing in a big stage, I want to let my voice to get everybody knows.

✓ In my opinion, singing is a relaxing and entertaining activity, so if I had a chance to sing on a big stage, I would want to let my voice be known by everybody.

'in a big stage'中的介词'in'用错，正确用法是'on a big stage'。

× In my opinion, seeing is a relaxing and entertaining activities, so if I had a chance to sing in a big stage, I want to let my voice to get everybody knows.

✓ In my opinion, singing is a relaxing and entertaining activity, so if I had a chance to sing on a big stage, I would want to let my voice be known by everybody.

条件句中使用虚拟语气，主句应使用would表达假设的未来情况，'I want'应改为'I would want'。

× I would say yes. From my point of view, if I am in a bad condition, I would choose to listen to some music that I like. That will make me feel a lot of much better.

✓ I would say yes. From my point of view, if I am in a bad condition, I would choose to listen to some music that I like. That will make me feel much better.

'a lot of much better'表达重复且错误，应简化为'much better'。