Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“make me very freedom”应为“make me feel free”。建议简化表达，避免重复，并使用更准确的词汇。

例: Yes, I like singing because it allows me to express my emotions freely. Singing makes me feel relaxed and happy.

提案: 回答中语法和用词错误较多，如“according to the music singer”应为“by imitating singers”。建议使用更准确的表达，并避免重复“I think”。

例: Not really. I usually imitate singers I like. I find singing interesting and believe it can be learned by practice rather than formal lessons.

提案: 回答中句子结构混乱，表达不清晰。建议简化句子，明确表达情感，并注意语法和连贯性。

例: I want to sing for my family because they are very important to me. Singing for them makes me feel happy and loved.

提案: 回答中多次出现“seeing”应为“singing”，且表达不够自然。建议注意词汇准确性，使用更自然的表达方式。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness because music connects people’s emotions and creates joyful feelings.

× I want to sing for my family because they are my favorite person I want to stay with while I sing for my family.

✓ I want to sing for my family because they are my favorite people I want to stay with while I sing for my family.

这里的“person”应该用复数形式“people”，因为“family”指的是一家人，包含多个人。单复数不一致导致语法错误。

× It will make me very freedom and I can I can get the fluency and availability from the scene.

✓ It will make me feel very free and I can get fluency and confidence from the scene.

“freedom”是名词，句中需要形容词“free”来描述感受；“availability”用词不当，应该用“confidence”或“fluency”来表达流利和自信。

× I think I can express my emotions and my feelings according to the saying.

✓ I think I can express my emotions and my feelings through singing.

“according to the saying”用法不当，表达“通过唱歌”应使用介词“through”。

× I feel very I feel very happy and are the many love surrounded by me.

✓ I feel very happy and there is a lot of love surrounding me.

原句中“are the many love surrounded by me”结构混乱，主谓不一致，且“love”不可数，需用“there is”结构表达存在。

× I think seeing is very easy, No need to learn some practical skills.

✓ I think singing is very easy; there is no need to learn some practical skills.

“seeing”应为“singing”，且句子缺少主语和谓语，需补充完整；“No need to”前应加主语和谓语。