Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，如"seeing"应为"singing"，时态混乱。建议使用正确的时态和词汇，句子结构更清晰，避免重复表达。

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and relieve stress after a long day at school. It also lifts my mood and makes me feel happier.

提案: 回答内容不清晰，语法和表达混乱，缺乏直接回答问题。建议直接回答是否学过唱歌，并简要说明学习经历。

例: Yes, I have taken singing lessons at my school before. They were very helpful and convenient, but I haven't joined any singing classes recently.

提案: 回答中代词使用错误，语法不准确，表达不连贯。建议使用正确的代词和时态，表达清晰完整。

例: I want to sing for my father because he works hard to support our family. Singing for him is my way to show appreciation and love.

提案: 回答不完整且表达混乱，缺乏具体例子和连贯性。建议完整回答问题，使用具体例子支持观点，并保持句子连贯。

例: Yes, I believe singing can bring happiness to people because songs often express positive emotions. For example, cheerful songs can lift people's spirits and make them feel joyful.

× Actually seeing is my favorite hobby because it's very helpful when I was tired of my task of school.

✓ Actually, singing is my favorite hobby because it was very helpful when I was tired of my school tasks.

这里的时态需要保持一致，描述过去的情况时应使用过去时。原句中“it's very helpful”应改为“it was very helpful”，且“seeing”应为“singing”，另外“task of school”应改为“school tasks”以符合复数形式。

× Actually seeing is my favorite hobby because it's very helpful when I was tired of my task of school.

✓ Actually, singing is my favorite hobby because it was very helpful when I was tired of my school tasks.

“task”应使用复数形式“tasks”，因为通常学校的任务不止一个。

× Actually, why would Little Old School provide a singing lesson for US students? It a it was very convenient and helpful to us.

✓ Actually, why would Little Old School provide a singing lesson for us students? It was very convenient and helpful to us.

“US students”中的“US”应为小写“us”，表示“我们”，且句中多余的“a it”应删除。

× But after that, I don't take part in any less after class any more.

✓ But after that, I didn't take part in any lessons after class anymore.

描述过去的动作时应使用过去时，“don't take part”应改为“didn't take part”，且“less”应为“lessons”。

× Let me see, I want to sing for my father because she because he is the supporter in my home so he always be busy about work.

✓ Let me see, I want to sing for my father because he is the supporter in my home and he is always busy with work.

“she”错误地指代“father”，应改为“he”，且“always be busy about work”应改为“is always busy with work”。

× I can feel hers, I can feel his heart.

✓ I can feel his heart.

“hers”错误地使用，且句子重复，保留正确的“his heart”即可。

× Actually, most people like singing just because this reason many kind of songs can represent and spread the happiness.

✓ Actually, most people like singing just because many kinds of songs can represent and spread happiness.

原句结构混乱，应拆分为两部分，且“many kind of songs”应为“many kinds of songs”，“the happiness”应去掉冠词。