Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

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例: I don't really like singing because I have a bad voice and often forget the words. Therefore, I don't consider singing a strong point of mine.

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例: When I was a child, I attempted singing and performed in small concerts for my parents. However, I never attended formal singing classes because I preferred to teach myself by practicing at home and listening carefully to my favorite songs. This method helped me improve gradually, even without professional training.

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例: Definitely, I want to sing to my lovely wife to express how much I love her. I would choose beautiful lyrics from a romantic song and sing them tenderly to make her feel special. Singing for her would be a wonderful way to show my feelings and strengthen our relationship.

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例: Yes, definitely. I believe singing can bring happiness to people because it helps them relax and reduce stress. For example, when people sing, they often feel more confident and open, which improves their mood and overall well-being.

× Oh, oh, singing, singing is not very good point of me.

✓ Oh, oh, singing is not a very good point of mine.

The phrase 'not very good point of me' is incorrect because 'point' needs an article and the possessive pronoun should be 'mine' to indicate possession. The correct phrase is 'not a very good point of mine.'

× I have a bad voice, I don't know the words, so thinking it's not good.

✓ I have a bad voice and I don't know the words, so I think it's not good.

The original sentence incorrectly uses commas to join independent clauses and the phrase 'so thinking' is ungrammatical. It should be 'so I think' to correctly express the speaker's opinion.

× Strong part of my life.

✓ Singing is not a strong part of my life.

The original sentence is a fragment without a verb and subject. To be complete, it needs a subject and verb, such as 'Singing is not a strong part of my life.'

× When I was a child, I attempt singing and even performed in a few small concerts for my parents.

✓ When I was a child, I attempted singing and even performed in a few small concerts for my parents.

The verb 'attempt' should be in the past tense 'attempted' to agree with the past time reference 'When I was a child.'

× I prefer to be self-taught by practicing at home and listening carefully to my favorite songs.

✓ I prefer to be self-taught through practicing at home and listening carefully to my favorite songs.

The preposition 'by' is less appropriate here; 'through' better expresses the means by which the speaker is self-taught.

× This method helped me to improve gradually even though I didn't have professional.

✓ This method helped me to improve gradually even though I didn't have professional training.

The phrase 'didn't have professional' is incomplete; it needs a noun such as 'training' to complete the meaning.

× Oh definitely, I want to sing to my lovely wife to express how much I love her.

✓ Oh definitely, I want to sing for my lovely wife to express how much I love her.

The verb 'sing' is usually followed by the preposition 'for' when indicating the person you sing to, not 'to.'

× I would find some beautiful lyrics from a romantic song and try to sing it very tenderly to make her feel special.

✓ I would find some beautiful lyrics from a romantic song and try to sing them very tenderly to make her feel special.

The pronoun 'it' refers to 'lyrics,' which is plural, so the correct pronoun is 'them.'

× Singing for her would be a wonderful way to show my feelings and make our relationship even stronger.

✓ Singing to her would be a wonderful way to show my feelings and make our relationship even stronger.

When indicating the person who receives the action of singing, the correct preposition is 'to' rather than 'for.'

× For example, when people think, they often feel more confident and open which improves their mood and overall well-being.

✓ For example, when people sing, they often feel more confident and open, which improves their mood and overall well-being.

The verb 'think' does not fit the context; it should be 'sing' to relate to the topic. Also, a comma is needed before 'which' to separate the relative clause.