Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答不够自然，表达不清晰，存在语法错误和用词不当（如“make me a wine”应为“make me unwind”）。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免重复。

例: Yes, I like singing because it helps me relax and enjoy time with my friends and family. Singing together creates a joyful atmosphere.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，句子结构混乱。建议使用正确的时态和句型，表达清晰，避免重复。

例: No, I have never formally learned how to sing. However, I believe everyone can sing if they listen to music often. Although I'm not very good at singing, I enjoy it a lot.

提案: 回答中有语法和表达错误，句子冗长且不连贯。建议简洁表达，使用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: I like to sing for my friends, family, and classmates. In China, singing is a common activity when people socialize, so I usually sing for people I am familiar with.

提案: 回答中多处用词错误（如“things”应为“singing”），表达不清晰。建议用准确词汇表达观点，避免重复。

例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness to people who love it. It helps them relax and unwind, making it a great way to relieve stress.

× Well, I like things because I think singing for me is a really good time to make me a wine.

✓ Well, I like singing because I think singing is a really good way for me to relax.

这里'singing'作为动名词使用，表示喜欢唱歌。原句中'things'不明确且不合适，且'make me a wine'表达错误，应改为'relax'表示放松。

× And I like to sing, sing with my friend and with my family.

✓ And I like to sing, sing with my friends and with my family.

'friend'应使用复数形式'friends'，因为通常指多个朋友。

× Actually not I don't.

✓ Actually, no, I don't.

这里表达否定时应使用'no'而非'not'，且句子结构应调整以符合英语习惯。

× I didn't learn how to sing, but I think every can sing.

✓ I haven't learned how to sing, but I think everyone can sing.

'didn't learn'改为现在完成时'haven't learned'更符合语境；'every'应为'everyone'。

× Everyone can sing if he or if he often listen to the music.

✓ Everyone can sing if they often listen to music.

'Everyone'是单数，但为避免性别歧视，常用复数代词'they'；'listen'应与主语一致用第三人称单数形式'listens'。

× if he or if he often listen to the music.

✓ if he or she often listens to music.

主语为第三人称单数，动词应加's'，即'listens'。

× And I think for me, I I'm not good at singing, but I like to sing it.

✓ And I think for me, I'm not good at singing, but I like to sing.

'like to sing it'中'it'多余，应去掉。

× A lot of a person just like my friends, my family and my my classmates because in China, singing is is a common things that are common activities during the communications when you chat with your friends.

✓ A lot of people, just like my friends, my family and my classmates, because in China, singing is a common activity during communication when you chat with your friends.

'a lot of a person'应为'a lot of people'；'things'应为单数'activity'；'communications'应为不可数名词'communication'。

× So I think you can sing for everyone who was familiar with.

✓ So I think you can sing for everyone you are familiar with.

'who was familiar with'结构不完整，应改为'you are familiar with'。

× I think things can bring happiness for everyone who loves seeing and it's a good time for people to make him unwind.

✓ I think singing can bring happiness to everyone who loves singing, and it's a good way for people to unwind.

'things'应为'singing'；'make him unwind'表达不自然，应改为'unwind'；'for people to make him unwind'结构错误。

× I think things can bring happiness for everyone who loves seeing

✓ I think singing can bring happiness to everyone who loves singing

'bring happiness for'应为'bring happiness to'，介词使用错误。

× And I think seeing is not just activities, but it also a good way to relax.

✓ And I think singing is not just an activity, but also a good way to relax.

'seeing'应为'singing'；'activities'应为单数'an activity'；'it also a good way'缺少动词'is'。