Singing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm, but it lacks clarity and contains some grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more concise and clear, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

例: Yes, I really enjoy singing because it allows me to express my emotions and share meaningful messages through the lyrics. It makes me feel inspired and excited.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and unclear. Try to respond directly and avoid unnecessary phrases. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and provide specific reasons.

例: No, I have never formally learned how to sing. I sing simply because I enjoy it, and it helps me express my emotions through meaningful messages in songs.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains some contradictions. Make sure to express your ideas clearly and avoid confusing statements. Keep your answer concise and relevant to the question.

例: I like to sing for my best friend because she is very supportive and never judges me. Singing for her makes me feel confident and comfortable.

提案: Your answer is positive but contains some grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. Use correct grammar and clearer expressions. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas.

例: Yes, absolutely. Singing can bring happiness to people because meaningful lyrics can boost emotions and inspire others. It is truly captivating and uplifting.

× Yes, I really like singing because I love the lyrics that I can send the message to each other and they can listen to my voice, listen to my emotion also because I feel that really inspired and exciting.

✓ Yes, I really like singing because I love the lyrics through which I can send messages to each other and they can listen to my voice and my emotions as well because I feel really inspired and excited.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'send the message to each other' which is unclear and awkward. 'Send messages to each other' is more appropriate. Also, 'listen to my emotion' should be plural 'emotions' and 'feel that really inspired and exciting' should be 'feel really inspired and excited' to correctly use adjectives describing feelings.

× Actually, no, I've never learned how to sing.

✓ Actually, no, I've never learnt how to sing.

In British English, the past participle of 'learn' is commonly 'learnt' rather than 'learned'. Since the context is likely British English, 'learnt' is preferred.

× And I find this very inspiring and exciting when I send messages to my voice and all of the message is very meaningful and it's all of my emotion, you know?

✓ And I find this very inspiring and exciting when I send messages through my voice and all of the messages are very meaningful and they express all of my emotions, you know?

The phrase 'send messages to my voice' is incorrect; it should be 'send messages through my voice'. Also, 'all of the message is' should be plural 'all of the messages are' to agree with plural 'messages'. 'It's all of my emotion' should be plural 'all of my emotions' and better expressed as 'they express all of my emotions'.

× I always want to sing for my best friend because I know that she will never judge me.

✓ I always want to sing for my best friend because I know that she will never judge me.

No grammatical error detected in this sentence regarding singular and plural usage.

× I really can't feel confident in front of her and I love the way she will support me and listen to me whenever I sing and whenever.

✓ I really can't feel confident in front of her but I love the way she supports me and listens to me whenever I sing.

The phrase 'I really can't feel confident' is awkward; it should be 'I really feel confident'. However, since the student likely means they do feel confident, correction is made accordingly. Also, 'she will support me and listen to me whenever I sing and whenever' is incomplete and awkward; 'she supports me and listens to me whenever I sing' is clearer and grammatically correct.

× Singing can bring happiness to people, to the lyrics.

✓ Singing can bring happiness to people through the lyrics.

The phrase 'to the lyrics' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'through' to indicate the means by which singing brings happiness.

× With meaningful lyrics, it can boost emotion and inspite others.

✓ With meaningful lyrics, it can boost emotions and inspire others.

'Boost emotion' should be plural 'boost emotions' to match the context. 'Inspite others' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'inspire others'.